Talk:Traveling Salesmen/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Gen. Quon (talk · contribs) 20:55, 27 January 2012 (UTC)

Checking against GA criteria

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

   "The old picture of Jim and Dwight was a photoshop of Krasinski's real high school photograph with a 1991 image of Rainn Wilson while he was on tour with an acting company." Maybe re-word? I'm not sure I understood who's head was photoshoped onto what.

   "In his review of the third season, Travis Fickett of IGN highlighted a scene of the episode; he commented, 'Watching Andy slowly meltdown when he can't find his cell phone is one of the better moments of the season.'" Didn't this take place during the events of "The Return (The Office)"

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

   Ref 13, OfficeTally is citing an official NBC document, but it is a fan cite. Might I suggest you cite the actual NBC press release? The only thing that isn't there is the url, which seems to be broken. (Just because I'm nice, the citation template would look like: {{cite press release |title=Jan. 17, 2007 Press Release ("Traveling Salesmen")| archiveurl =http://www.officetally.com/the-office-nielsen-ratings/2| archivedate =10 October 2008|url= http://www.nbcumv.com/entertainment/release_detail.nbc/entertainment-20070117000000-nbcratingsresults.html|publisher=NBC|date=27 February 2007|accessdate=23 January 2012-01}})

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

   Thorough coverage, no sign of trivia

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

   Neural POV

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

   No edit warring

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

   Two pictures, properly tagged. I really like finding pictures for the infobox. Maybe add one of Dwight and Angela together or the scene where Dwight leaves and note how it relates to the episode

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

   On hold for seven days for above issues to be addressed.--Gen. Quon (talk) 00:56, 28 January 2012 (UTC)

Sorry for the response delay. I have implemented your recommendations (including uploading a new screenshot; let me know what you think). Thanks for the review! Ruby 2010/2013 02:20, 29 January 2012 (UTC)

Well done, I pass this!--Gen. Quon (talk) 04:03, 29 January 2012 (UTC)