Talk:Time Has Come Today (Grey's Anatomy)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: M.Mario (talk · contribs) 16:27, 5 July 2012 (UTC)

Disambigs, Refs & External

• Please fix the disambigs.

 Working Could you name the disambiguation links? Jonathan Harold Koszeghi (talk) 10:44, 8 July 2012 (UTC)

 Done - Ive done it for you. — M.Mario (T/C) 10:53, 8 July 2012 (UTC)

• IMDB is an unreliable source, and should be deleted unless I will have to fail the article. Make sure you replace with another reference.
• Please link Works and Publishers on all refs
• Reference 10- References should not be in capital letters.
• There are no external links? Such as the Greys Anatomy template, this needs fixing!

Infobox

• Again, the music needs to be in the article.
• Link characters of Olivia Harper, etc.

Lead

• storylines is one word - fix throughout article.
• Missing a ) after Ellen Pompeo.
• Take California out of brakets, just put Los Angeles, California.
• "Loretta Devine (Adele Webber) reprised her role as a guest star, in addition to Chris O'Donnell (Finn Dandridge), Kate Burton (Dr. Ellis Grey) and Sarah Utterback (Olivia Harper)" -> In the first paragraph and most episodes it goes character then actor in brackets, however you swap them round. Put; the characters of Adele Webber (Loretta Devine)....
• "The title of the episode refers to the song, "Time Has Come Today", by the soul music band, The Chambers Brothers" -> Source?
• "Running for 45 minutes and 38 seconds" -> Not needed in Lead.

Plot

• "requesting a choice between his career as a surgeon and his marriage to her" -> giving him a choice between his career or his marriage.
• "Dr. Preston Burke (Isaiah Washington) faces the aftermath of the shooting" -> Dr. Preston Burke (Isaiah Washington) faces the aftermath of being shot, past tense.
• "An infant with a severe heart condition is admitted in neonatology, and is revealed to have been abandoned in a schoolyard by his biological mother, whose identity lies between four pre-adolescents" -> Boy's name and actor. Maybe explain "four pre-adolescents".

 Not done The boy was admitted in neonatology, therefore, he was a newborn. He was not credited, as many baby actors on television. Jonathan Harold Koszeghi (talk) 10:10, 8 July 2012 (UTC)

• Link quaritine to appropriate article.
• Link "plague".
• "and ultimately dies in Dr. Miranda Bailey (Chandra Wilson)'s guilt" -> and ultimately dies in Dr. Miranda Bailey (Chandra Wilson)'s care
• "to the guilt over the death of both Toussant and Duquette." -> to the guilt over the death of both Toussant and Duquette, whom she also operated on.

Production

• Image: Put full name and Link. Also, put (pictured).
• Link "second season".
• "which is the headquarters building for the media company Fisher Communications and Fisher's ABC affiliated Komo radio and television stations for Seattle" -> Needs to be cut down, "media company" is not needed. Also, you need to mention that the series is set in Seatle.
• Im not sure whether the location information is neccesary to the artice, more to the main Grey's Anatomy article.

 Not done I think it is helpful information to the reader, in order to contrast the fictional setting and the filming setting.

• Change "taped" to "filmed".
• Unlink second mention of second season.
• "Because Denny died, and Burke got shot and Meredith lost her panties.", stated Rhimes" -> Removed .
• Put surname of actors in brackets.

Not sure who you are referring to.

• "the prominence Grey's underwear has in the first episode of the season" - the prominence which Grey's underwear has in the first episode of the season...

Reception

• Reception: Nielsen -> Nielsen ratings
• "Meredith Grey, whose story line received negative critiques" -> Meredith not needed.
• Remember to put actor names in brackets.

Not sure (again) who you are referring to.

For the crosses, what I mean is: Izzie (Heigl), Meredith (Pompeo), like that. Good work! — M.Mario (T/C) 10:26, 8 July 2012 (UTC)

But am I not supposed do to that only twice for each character? Once in the lead and once in the article. Jonathan Harold Koszeghi (talk) 10:44, 8 July 2012 (UTC)

Well as a reader, by the time I had got to Reception, I had forgot who played who, however, it is not neccesary, nor part of the criteria. Once you have finished the points you still say you are fixing, then I will pass. — M.Mario (T/C) 10:50, 8 July 2012 (UTC)

 Done All issues have been addressed. Thank you so much for your thorough review! Jonathan Harold Koszeghi (talk) 11:16, 8 July 2012 (UTC)