Talk:Third Amendment to the United States Constitution/GA1

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Reviewer: Wehwalt (talk · contribs) 23:23, 25 July 2013 (UTC) I've looked it over. A few comments, but generally this seems to meet the grade:Reply

Lede
  • "prohibits, in peacetime or wartime, the quartering of soldiers in private homes without the owner's consent. " Is that really what it says? I agree on the peacetime bit, but in time of war, it seems to say that Congress can prescribe for it.
You're quite right; I'm not sure if I inherited this sentence and failed to fix it or simply blundered in its writing. Does this phrasing seem better? -- Khazar2 (talk) 01:25, 26 July 2013 (UTC)Reply
Background
  • If at all possible, diminish the frequency of use of the word "quartering" in the first paragraph and "constitution" in the second.
Cut one of each. -- Khazar2 (talk) 01:25, 26 July 2013 (UTC)Reply
Proposal and ratification
  • There seems to be a disconnect between the first and the second sentences of this section. We have Madison rummaging through books for various rights, then we have several "revisions" (is this the proper AmerEng term?) of the amendment. What is missing is a sentence about Madison writing the amendment.
I've added slightly more here. -- Khazar2 (talk) 01:25, 26 July 2013 (UTC)Reply
  • Not needed at the GA level but if you were to bring this to FAC I'd expect to see some discussion of the ratification debates, if the 3rd played any part in that, or at least if there was opposition to the 3rd's ratification and what it was based on if so.
I haven't found anything about opposition to the 3rd specifically, but I'll keep my eyes open. -- Khazar2 (talk) 01:25, 26 July 2013 (UTC)Reply
Judicial
  • "There have been no major Supreme Court cases concerning violations of the Third Amendment, and as of 2009, no Supreme Court decision has used the amendment as its primary basis" Cannot this be simplified?
Done. -- Khazar2 (talk) 01:25, 26 July 2013 (UTC)Reply
  • "Justice William O. Douglas cited the amendment as a partial basis " Perhaps "cited the amendment, with others in the Bill of Rights, as a partial basis". He had a whole laundry list as I recall.
Done -- Khazar2 (talk) 01:25, 26 July 2013 (UTC)Reply
Case law
  • What's the difference between judicial and case law?
Fair point--removing unneeded subheader. -- Khazar2 (talk) 01:25, 26 July 2013 (UTC)Reply
  • I would add a sentence to your discussion of Engblom stating that despite the finding, the case was dismissed on remand, basically because there was so little case law on the 3rd, that the state officials couldn't have known they were violating it.--Wehwalt (talk) 23:23, 25 July 2013 (UTC)Reply
Done. -- Khazar2 (talk) 01:25, 26 July 2013 (UTC)Reply

Let me know if you think these edits cover the points above, and thanks for all the solid suggestions. -- Khazar2 (talk) 01:25, 26 July 2013 (UTC)Reply

They're fine. Promoting momentarily.--Wehwalt (talk) 01:34, 26 July 2013 (UTC)Reply
This article has been promoted to GA. I find it meets the criteria (sorry about no fancy template).--Wehwalt (talk) 01:46, 26 July 2013 (UTC)Reply