Talk:The Quest Begins/GA1

Latest comment: 13 years ago by Bobamnertiopsis in topic GA Review

GA Review edit

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Reviewer: BobAmnertiopsisChatMe! 17:54, 13 March 2011 (UTC)Reply

GA review (see here for criteria)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose):   b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
    In regard to 3a: In the "Conception" section, there are two references that those who know nothing about this book or any in the Warriors series will understand. The first is a reference to Victoria Holmes, which seems contradictory to the statement that it was written by Erin Hunter. You may wish to state Holmes's role in creating the stories' plots, both in the past and present (ie, "Holmes had developed the plot for other books in the Warriors series including X, Y, and Z, and was again tasked to do the same for a new book about a different type of animal." Or something.) The other point is that, with no reference to the Warriors series, there is no justification for the sentence "The company suggested dogs to Holmes, but the idea was rejected since dogs behave very similarly to cats." Please consider adding some reference of why cats were not good (again, obviously, the Warriors series.) Looks good.
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:  

This article is close to GA status. I went through and nitpicked with copyediting and syntax, and the two issues with 3a are the only I see as needing resolution before I can pass this article. Nice job. I'll put it on hold for one week. BobAmnertiopsisChatMe! 18:39, 13 March 2011 (UTC)Reply

I've added a mention of the pseudonym in the lead, and further mention of Holmes' role in the Warriors series later. I also added a short phrase/clause that should help clear up why dogs were rejected (not because cats were bad, but because it would be too similar to the Warriors series). Brambleclawx 14:40, 16 March 2011 (UTC)Reply
Okeedokee, thanks so much for the clarifications! I'll be promoting this article now. BobAmnertiopsisChatMe! 14:44, 16 March 2011 (UTC)Reply