Talk:The Mikado (Millennium)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Gen. Quon (talk · contribs) 17:45, 7 July 2012 (UTC)

• General note: Quite a few red links. Maybe trim those down a bit

  I took out all the ones in the guest star list apart from Zinyk, he's appeared in Millenium and The X-Files a few times so he's a good candidate for an article to be created; same with Pridy the director. GRAPPLE X 02:26, 9 July 2012 (UTC)

• Lede: The second paragraphs seems a little thin. Maybe flesh it out?

  Bulked. GRAPPLE X 02:26, 9 July 2012 (UTC)

• Plot: "The IP address leads to another live feed like the first one" -> "The IP address leads to another live feed similar in nature to the first one"

  Fixed. GRAPPLE X 02:26, 9 July 2012 (UTC)

• Production: I would add a cite after every direct quote

  Sure. GRAPPLE X 02:26, 9 July 2012 (UTC)

• Production: "…wondered what would investigations would arise…" Maybe I'm just reading this wrong, but I think there's something missing here

  Yeah I think I spazzed on that one. "...wondered what sort of investigations would arise" now. GRAPPLE X 02:26, 9 July 2012 (UTC)

• Production: "learnt" -> "had learned" (Just think it reads better)

  Changed. GRAPPLE X 02:26, 9 July 2012 (UTC)

That's all I can find. On hold for seven days. By the way, are we going to have to add the timers for all The X-Files articles? Yikes...--Gen. Quon (Talk) 02:07, 9 July 2012 (UTC)

Thanks for the review on this one. I wouldn't sweat the times (I assume you mean the cite video times), I just felt that since the video was 40+ minutes long it would be better; most of what we use elsewhere is 2-3 minutes long. I used the same technique for a video commentary in Episode 2 (Twin Peaks) so it was easy enough to copy it over. GRAPPLE X 02:26, 9 July 2012 (UTC)

Looks good. I will pass this.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 14:02, 9 July 2012 (UTC)