Talk:That's the Woman I Want

Latest comment: 4 years ago by MWright96 in topic GA Review

GA Review edit

This review is transcluded from Talk:That's the Woman I Want/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 14:51, 7 April 2020 (UTC)Reply

Going to review this article as part of the GAN Backlog Drive of April to May 2020. MWright96 (talk) 14:51, 7 April 2020 (UTC)Reply

  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose):   b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:  

Pilot edit

  • "Lindolfo Chaves is the president of a tobacco company based in Havana," - more concise president of a Havana-based tobacco company
  • "his doctor diagnoses him with a heart murmur" - what type of heart murmur?
  • "his uncle's arrival comes at a bad time for Ruperto: " - try not to use word such as "at a bad time"
  • "with the help of Sócrates, Ruperto's butler," - how about with the help of Ruperto's butler Sócrates instead?
  • "the three characters play out the farce in front of Uncle Lindolfo. Lindolfo believes the ruse" - Try not to have the last word of a sentence start the next one like this

Production edit

  • "by company Bolívar Films," - perhaps clarify what type of company Bolívar Films was
  • "as an opportunity to create his own feature in Venezuela." - feature film
  • "and used the same crew as El demonio es un ángel." - from

Marketing and release edit

  • Please state briefly who María Gabriela Colmenares is
  • "Some of these slogans explicitly promoted the famous Venezuelan composer Eduardo Serrano," - the word "famous" isn't needed IMO
  • "Some of the promotions before release also include newspaper interviews," - promotions of the film before its release
  • "The press release on the day of premiere, Colmenares explains" - In the press release on the day of the premiere, Colmenares explains that it,
  • Also, is the press release from Bolivar Films or another entity? It would help for clarity

Analysis edit

  • "Colmenares writes (in 1999 and 2005) that" - I don't feel that the parentheses are needed as it looks like a sidenote instead
  • "Azuaga García also notes that That's the Woman I Want is, along with The Yacht Isabel Arrived This Afternoon, "the most representative," - The Yacht Isabel Arrived This Afternoon are "the most representative,"
  • "In 2009, Colmenares looked at the credits of the film," - more formal; observed

Sources edit

  • Be consistent in listing the location field in the sources where possible

Am going to place the review on hold to enable the nominator to action/respond to the queries raised above. MWright96 (talk) 08:49, 8 April 2020 (UTC)Reply

    • Thank you a detailed review - I think I've done everything except the heart murmur, which the film only calls a heart murmur. Kingsif (talk) 17:18, 8 April 2020 (UTC)Reply