Talk:Supermarine Stranraer/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: PizzaKing13 (talk · contribs) 05:00, 28 October 2022 (UTC)

I'll go ahead and review this article. PizzaKing13 (Hablame) 05:00, 28 October 2022 (UTC)

Infobox

The name parameter should say "Supermarine Stranraer"

Done, but kindly reverted by another editor. Amitchell125 (talk) 08:58, 28 October 2022 (UTC)

"Maritime Reconnaissance" → "Maritime reconnaissance"

Mention the year it was retired from military service

Later in the body, it says that several aircraft served until 1958, while the infobox says it was retired in 1957. Which is correct?

For the infobox see Wikipedia:WikiProject_Aircraft/page_content#Infobox "For the most part, as there is an appropriate field in the infobox itself, including the manufacturer in the "name" field is not necessary".Nigel Ish (talk) 08:53, 28 October 2022 (UTC)

Lead

All good Y PizzaKing13 (Hablame) 05:59, 28 October 2022 (UTC)

Design and development

Background

Is there not a specific year that development commenced?

Replace "However" with something along the lines of "Despite the rejection"

Prototypes and production

"During 1933" → "In 1933"

Remove "was placed" from "initial order was placed for 17 aircraft", there is a duplicate after the serial numbers

"during December 1936" → "in December 1936"

Do we know why the May 1936 order for K9676 to K9681 was canceled? Also, is this the same May 1936 order as the one mentioned in the prior paragraph? Seems odd to me that the mention of its cancelation is in a separate paragraph if that's the case.

I think the canceled bit was incorrect, it's now gone. Text now reorganised. Amitchell125 (talk) 16:09, 28 October 2022 (UTC)

"Supermarine and Canadian Vickers being subsidiaries of Vickers-Armstrongs" is a fragment (semicolon isn't used properly). Change it to "by Canadian Vickers Limited, as both Supermarine and Canadian Vickers were subsidiaries of Vickers-Armstrongs."

Description

Paragraph 1

Fix comma after "flying boat" to a period

Add "and" before "its take-off weight"

Typo in "all- metal frame" (?), remove the space between "all-metal"

"It was widened at the shoulders" What does that mean? Widened in comparison to what?

Paragraph 2

"As it progressed" As what progressed? Development?

I'm pretty sure it should be "wings'" rather than "wing's"

Is there a specific reason the Bristol Pegasus IIIM was chosen over the Rolls-Royce Kestrel?

Paragraph 3

Add "and" between "Stranraer" and "different"

Paragraph 4

Add "made of" between "which were" and "metal"

Is there a specific type of bomb the aircraft could carry?

I've looked but found no information. Amitchell125 (talk) 09:00, 28 October 2022 (UTC)

Operational history

Military use prior to September 1939

Remove "Supermarine" from "The Supermarine Stranraer and its contemporary", we already know its from Supermarine

Add a comma after "from 1937"

Add a period after "they entered service"

"primarily by" → "primarily with"

Action during the Second World War

Make "use of the Stranraer for such patrols came to an end on 17 March 1941" its own sentence (take it out of the semicolon)

Civilian use

Add a comma after "From May 1935"

Remove "However," its not necessary

Operators

Military

[[File:Canadian Red Ensign 1921-1957.svg|22px]] [[Canada]] → "{{flag|Canada|1921}}"

Civilian

{{USA}} → "{{flag|United States|1912}}"

References are needed for Pacific Western Airlines and Wardair

Surviving aircraft

What happened to the other aircraft? Were they scrapped/destroyed?

References and sources

Sources, navbars, and categories are good Y

Images

Supermarine Stranraer 3 ExCC.jpg – Y

Supermarine Aviation Ltd, Woolston.jpg – Y

Supermarine Stranraer - John Player.jpg – Y

Supermarine Stranraer 2 ExCC.jpg – Y

Supermarine Stranraer 912.jpg – Y

Aircraft of the Royal Air Force 1939-1945- Supermarine Stranraer. CH2551.jpg – Y

Supermarine Stranraer.jpg – Y

Overall

Make sure the order of units is consistent. Background Paragraph 1, Description Paragraph 5, Military use prior to September 1939 Paragraph 2, and Specifications list Imperial (Metric). Description Paragraph 1 and Description Paragraph 5 list Metric (Imperial).

Neutral POV Y

Topic covered thoroughly Y

Stays on topic Y

Page is stable Y

Layout is good Y

Final remarks

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

@Amitchell125: Well done! Just some comments and suggestions to address and I'll pass this review. PizzaKing13 (Hablame) 05:57, 28 October 2022 (UTC)

@PizzaKing13: All points now addressed, hopefully. Many thanks for your thorough review. Amitchell125 (talk) 16:11, 28 October 2022 (UTC)

@Amitchell125: Everything has been addressed. I'll pass this article now. PizzaKing13 (Hablame) 18:22, 28 October 2022 (UTC)

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.