Talk:Skinners Falls–Milanville Bridge/GA1

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Comments:

1. The lead of the article is very short. Can more information be added?
2. The sentence "Dating back from 1764, the crossing from Skinners Falls to Milanville, was the location of timber rafting by one of the most prominent families in the area of Skinners Falls, the Skinners." sounds awkward and needs to be reworded.
3. "from the Pennsylvania shores to the New York shores" sounds wordy. I would suggest changing to "across the river between Pennsylvania and New York".
4. "Twentieth Century" should be "20th century".
5. Which state did they receive a charter from, Pennsylvania or New York?
6. In sentence "The attorney of the Cohecton Bridge, John Anderson went to the capital to fight the construction of the bridge.", add comma after "John Anderson".
7. "November of 1902" should be "November 1902".
8. The sentence "An unfortunate person who could not drive over the bridge, but by foot, was charged nothing to cross the structure." is very awkward. I would reword it to say. "A person traveling on foot did not have to pay to cross the structure."
9. "which made it all unheard of"? Can this be reworded?
10. "March of 1904" should be "March 1904".
11. The sentence "In 1914, J. Skinner was the new owner, but the company was devastated when one of their timber rafts collided with a ferryboat, owned by the Myers family, killing four." sounds choppy.
12. The sentence "With the opening of the New York – Pennsylvania Joint Bridge Commission in the 1920s, to buy out these bridges from private ownership, the tolls along the bridges of the Delaware were beginning to come to an end." sounds choppy and awkward.
13. "The bridge had more activity after the elimination of tolls and the bridge continued to prosper.": You use "the bridge" twice in this sentence. Can the second instance be changed to "it".
14. The sentence "With the new owners, the bridge was kept under routine maintenance, and the bridge up to present day has maintained a strong structure." sounds awkward.
15. "the Commission" sounds colliqual.
16. You use only two sources in the entire article. Can additional sources be added for greater verification?

I am placing the article on hold. Dough4872 (talk) 16:39, 9 July 2009 (UTC)

Everything done but the last one, hold on for that one.Mitch/HC32 16:57, 9 July 2009 (UTC)

Done.Mitch/HC32 11:54, 10 July 2009 (UTC)

Since the article now has a couple more sources, I will pass it. Dough4872 (talk) 14:28, 10 July 2009 (UTC)