Talk:Six-spotted fishing spider

Latest comment: 3 years ago by Shay bala in topic Fellow student article feedback
General Suggestions edit

This article is particularly well organized for a small article. It has the basic information I would expect a spider article to have but is missing a section on the taxonomy of the species. While it contains bare information related to the family, genus and species, the spider articles typically have a more detailed section on taxonomy at the bottom. The section might include history of the spider’s discovery, and other related species. It would be useful to include this information for anyone researching spiders and interested in their classifications. The reproduction section could be improved with more citations and more detailed descriptions. Additionally, the article could contain categories on predators of the spider, which would be useful to complete the discussion of the spider’s behavior. Eanisman (talk) 01:24, 7 October 2020 (UTC)Reply

Behavioral Ecology Student Suggestions edit

I found this article easy to read, with good and concise writing. The predatory feeding section was particularly interesting and unique. I made a few edits removing redundant sentences as well as reorganizing the structure of the Diet / Predatory Feeding Section. 17lchang (talk) 16:48, 31 October 2020 (UTC)Reply

juliaskittle (talk) 9:59, 3 November 2020 (UTC)For this article I also added a lot of hyperlinks to help make it easier to learn more, especially because the author used a lot of complicated anatomical words in the Description section. I also added a little more description to the picture of the spider showing the markings. In addition, I made some basic word choice and sentence structure edits to improve the clarity of the piece. I deleted the “female/ male interactions heading since it felt redundant and unnecessary. This also meant that I changed the headings under “Mating” to be sub-headings 1s instead of sub-heading 2s. I really loved the introduction of this page; it drew me into the page and gave a great intro for what was to come.

Fellow student article feedback edit

Hi Sophie! Your article has an excellent amount of content and quite thoroughly documented the spider with a great number of references. The part of the article that needed the most improvement was the sentence structure and phrasing, since some of the sentences were a little winding or run-on. In addition, some of the sentences were phrased in passive voice when I felt an active voice was clearer. For example, I changed the statement, “venom is used to immobilize and kill prey” to “they use venom to immobilize and kill prey,” since it’s more direct about describing the spider. I also reorganized some of the information. I moved a paragraph about how the spider is able to dive beneath the surface of water from “locomotion” to a new section I created titled “Protective behavior.” I also removed a sentence in the “Habitat” section which was redundant with the information in that paragraph. The sentence was about how D. triton will dive underwater in response to a threat from a predator. Shay bala (talk) 05:32, 8 January 2021 (UTC)Reply