Talk:She said, "Don't make others suffer for your personal hatred."

GA Review

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Reviewer: Tintor2 (talk · contribs) 18:49, 2 March 2023 (UTC)

I'll be reviewing this article.Tintor2 (talk) 18:49, 2 March 2023 (UTC) GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

Lead.

• The premise is kinda long. It deals with the introduction to the series, a background and the content of the episode. Maybe trim it a bit?
• The second paragraph features about the making of the series but instead just the themes.

Plot

• Rei Ayanami and Gendo lack an introduction.

Production

• The image was drawn by Sadamoto right? Crediting him would be good.

Reception

• The merchandising remains kinda vague. Is it possible to explore it?

@TeenAngels1234: That's all.Tintor2 (talk) 02:57, 4 March 2023 (UTC)

@Tintor2: Tried my best. Thank you for the review.--TeenAngels1234 (talk) 11:14, 5 March 2023 (UTC)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a. (prose, spelling, and grammar):

   b. (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a. (reference section):

   b. (citations to reliable sources):

   c. (OR):

   d. (copyvio and plagiarism):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a. (major aspects):

   b. (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):

   b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/fail:

(Criteria marked are unassessed)

The article passes the 6 criteria:

• It is well written and has the fictional information easy to understand.
• Every part of the content is referenced.
• It covers nearly everything about the episode (creation, themes,analysis, response)
• It is written from a neutral point of view.

Good work.Tintor2 (talk) 14:00, 5 March 2023 (UTC)

Peele's fandom

Neither of the cited sources mentioned the series nor this episode. DHN (talk) 23:03, 30 April 2023 (UTC)

Since Sahaquiel only appears in this episode..--TeenAngels1234 (talk) 10:42, 1 May 2023 (UTC)

@DHN: I deleted the two sources. Probably there was something lost in the edits. Another user added this information to the Angels article and among the various edits evidently something went wrong.--TeenAngels1234 (talk) 16:50, 1 May 2023 (UTC)

Plot summary "is too wordy and in-deep to me"

I would like to discuss this point actually, since it was reverted. The thematic core of the episode is that both Shinji and Misato are both struggling with a conflict in regards to the "external" praise they have been given for their efforts (Shinji with his sync rate; Misato with her promotion) and they how both feel unfulfilled by this (Shinji's self-loathing makes him feels guilty for getting praise; Misato also struggles with self-loathing, so she doesn't care about her promotion) vs their "internal" wants towards their parental figures (Misato wanting to avenge her father so that she can "get even" with him for saving her life; Shinji wanting to get his father's praise). I think the current description as it stands is far too laconic to actually reflect these internal conflicts, which are quite important further down the line for the series. Hence, why I tried expanding on the summary. I suppose there is a less "wordy" way it could be done, but since my attempt was considered lacking I'm not sure how this could be pulled off. I just can conclude that the current plot summary doesn't really accurately reflect the themes of the episode. -- U'et (talk) 19:29, 3 August 2023 (UTC)