Talk:Sam Loxton with the Australian cricket team in England in 1948/GA1

GA Review edit

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This article is very good overall, as expected. Here are some things that need fixing though:

  • "He was again left out for the next match against Cambridge University, which resulted in another innings triumph.[1][6] which Australia won by an innings.[12]" Um.. either part of the last sentence is missing or there's an extra fragment, not sure which.
Fixed. YellowMonkey (click here to vote for world cycling's #1 model!) 05:06, 17 February 2009 (UTC)Reply
  • cricinfo.com requires registration, which may be an issue for a couple refs. Not a huge issue but not one to ignore either.
Standard disclaimer added. YellowMonkey (click here to vote for world cycling's #1 model!) 05:06, 17 February 2009 (UTC)Reply
  • I understand Brown was the man ahead of Loxton, but the first ashes series section, and to an extent some other parts, it almost feels as if I'm reading his article rather than Loxton's. At the same time, the other cricketers being added in does contribute to the article more fully. Tweak it a little bit, though an overhaul shouldn't be necessary.
Pruned a bit, YellowMonkey (click here to vote for world cycling's #1 model!) 05:06, 17 February 2009 (UTC)Reply
  • "Loxton was unbeaten on 159 when Johnson fell, prompting Hassett to declare." Prompting him to declare what?
wikilinked and clarified. YellowMonkey (click here to vote for world cycling's #1 model!) 05:06, 17 February 2009 (UTC)Reply

I'll put it on hold and give you a few days to fix this. Wizardman 04:50, 17 February 2009 (UTC)Reply

Looks good, I'll pass the article now. Wizardman 05:38, 17 February 2009 (UTC)Reply