Talk:Pulveroboletus ravenelii

Latest comment: 10 years ago by J Milburn in topic GA Review

GA Review edit

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Reviewer: J Milburn (talk · contribs) 22:17, 1 October 2013 (UTC)Reply

A few quick thoughts-

  • "in Traditional Chinese medicine" Does the T need to be capitalised?
  • "Its color is bright yellow" I think we've talked about this before (and it may have been you picking me up on it); surely, the colour is not bright yellow, the cap is. Equally, a dog's fur is not furry, but the dog is.
  • "The taste and odor of the flesh has been described variously as indistinct,[3] or bitter tasting with an odor of hickory leaves.[5]" Same thing- how about "Flesh has been described variously as tasting and smelling indistinct,[3] or tasting bitter with an odor of hickory leaves.[5]"
  • "Its color is bright yellow." Again, although brightness is a trait of the colour. You could say "Its yellow colouration is bright", but just something like "The stem is bright yellow" would probably be easier.
  • "intergrade" is a bit jargony. That said, I like the word, so I'm happy for it to stay if you feel it belongs there.
  • I changed to "merges gradually". Sasata (talk) 14:44, 2 October 2013 (UTC)Reply

Great pictures, sources are fine, quick Googling around reveals nothing obvious missing. It's got an impressive veil! J Milburn (talk) 22:17, 1 October 2013 (UTC)Reply