Talk:Promise Neighborhoods

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Hi. While this article provides good, basic information for those interested in a summary of the grant and its timeline (though the timeline will need to be updated yearly), it is lacking in terms of content. It would be helpful to learn more about the origins of the initiative in addition to information on how to plan and build a Promise Neighborhood. A Vision/Conception/History tab would be helpful. The Promise Neighborhoods Institute homepage (referenced in the article) has a lot of valuable and substantive information.Aixle12 (talk) 03:11, 14 September 2011 (UTC)

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Source issues: outdated information and broken links

Sources 1, 2, 6, and 8 are all from 2010. The U.S. Department of Education already has data from 2016. It would be helpful to include some sources from this year. Sources 4, 5, and 6 are broken links that cannot be accessed.

Additionally, some stated information is not supported/mentioned in the cited source. In the third paragraph, "The three partner agencies that make up the institute are PolicyLink, the Center for the Study of Social Policy, and the Harlem Children's Zone." is cited with sources 3 and 4; source 3 does not mention the Harlem Children's Zone and source 4 is a broken link. Gledezma (talk) 02:26, 7 November 2017 (UTC)

Plagiarism

There is a large chunk of text that was copied directly from the U.S. Department of Education, with no paraphrasing at all. The second paragraph of the page beginning with "boosted students' academic outcomes dramatically..." and ending with "from birth through college or career." does not include any quotations. This information should be paraphrased in unique words, or be put in quotes and attributed to the author in source 1, in order to avoid plagiarism. https://www2.ed.gov/news/pressreleases/2010/04/04302010b.html Gledezma (talk) 02:38, 7 November 2017 (UTC)

Timetable and funding for 2010, Applications, and Awards Sections

These sections are outdated and provide no information on the content of the grants.

The "Timetable and funding for 2010" section should be removed and replaced with a separate section that includes the types of services and local programs enabled by the federal grants, or offer more details about the distribution of money from federal to local levels.

The "Applications" section includes only one sentence that provides a trivial data point from 2010; it should be removed.

Rather than simply listing the award recipients from 2010, the "Awards" section could include the outcomes/results/experiences at local levels, as a result of these grants.

Gledezma (talk) 02:50, 7 November 2017 (UTC)

Draws heavily from one source

Most of this Wikipedia article draws from data provided from the U.S. Department of Education. This article could benefit from providing perspectives from state and local levels, as well as independent sources.

Gledezma (talk) 02:52, 7 November 2017 (UTC)

Revisions in May 2018

The Promise Neighborhoods entry is in the process of revision. The article was missing background information about the policy, as well as recent legislative changes. Additionally, the article includes criticism lacking context and duplicates information between categories.

Several issues have been resolved so far:

• Created History section
• Moved content from top section of article to other sections, where appropriate
• Added citations
• Should the challenges and criticism sections be merged? They contain some duplicate information. + Whitehurst and Croft published their paper criticizng PNs before the first grants were even implemented. W&C is a common PN source, but perhaps it is good to discuss their article in context?

---I merged the GAO paragraphs and removed the claim that was attributed to dobbie and fryer by way of Whitehurst and Croft (2010). Kept Whitehurst and Croft quote. Added summary information from William Julius Wilson because his remarks have been influential and he has repeatedly written and spoken on the topic of PNs.Matg1513 (talk) 21:22, 18 May 2018 (UTC)

• Goals section appears to be a direct citation, not a paraphrase. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Matg1513 (talk contribs) 17:55, 18 May 2018 (UTC)

---I quoted PN's goals using the updated website. Removed unquoted, unparaphrased text. synthesized research and policy into an intro for the goals section. Added significant commentary from highly cited researchers.Matg1513 (talk) 22:14, 18 May 2018 (UTC)

To do:

• Add to History section
• Summarize https://www.mathematica-mpr.com/our-publications-and-findings/projects/promise-neighborhoods and add
• Add map of PNs from PNI?
• Should this article use the phrase Indian tribe? It is used by the legislation.

Matg1513 (talk) 17:26, 18 May 2018 (UTC)