Talk:Power Play: How Video Games Can Save the World
Content edit
Hello Shannon,
Looking at what you've done, although you haven't finished you've got a very clear introduction and I understood what your article was about within the first sentence. The content you've chosen is relevant to your topic and it's pretty recent as well. Your leading paragraph is concise and not overly detailed. It also very easy to read.
The content is definitely related to the topic and the content added, as I've mentioned earlier, is up to date as it's only two years old. Everything you've written also has a neutral tone that doesn't try to persuade the reader one way or another. I think you may need some secondary sources to back up any claims you may want to add in the future, but as it stands since it's an article on a book, I understand that could be quite difficult. Your article is very well written, but it is missing secondary sources. Your article definitely follows the Wikipedia format.
KyannaYeager (talk) 17:40, 13 November 2019 (UTC)