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1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS):

   Check for dabs.

   "Pilot" constitutes the first and second episodes of the first season of Lost, that premiered on September 22, 2004 (Part 1) and September 29, 2004 (Part 2) at ABC . Extra space at the end. Wording also needs to be fixed; try "Pilot" constitutes the first and second episodes of the first season of Lost; Part 1 premiered on September 22, 2004 and Part 2 premiered September 29, 2004 at ABC.

   The episodes were directed by J.J. Abrams, and written by Abrams along with Damon Lindelof, based on story by them and Jeffrey Lieber. is also not grammatically sound. Try The episodes were directed by J.J. Abrams, written by Abrams and Damon Lindelof, and based on a story created by Abrams, Lindelof, and Jeffrey Lieber.

   Three of the characters, Jack Shephard (Matthew Fox), Kate Austen (Evangeline Lilly) and Charlie Pace (Dominic Monaghan), are featured in flashbacks to their experiences as the plane breaks apart in midair; these scenes established Lost's distinctive use of flashbacks. makes no sense to me.

   As he attempts to gather his thoughts, he discovers a small bottle of vodka in his suit pocket. Finally able to stand, he crashes through the jungle vegetation and emerges onto an expansive beach, where he is confronted by the carnage of the airplane crash of Oceanic Flight 815. How does he go from "as he attempts to gather his thoughts" to "Finally able to stand" with no logical connection?

   All is in chaos, and in the confusion, one survivor gets sucked into a still spinning turbine. "All is in chaos" really isn't an Encyclopedic phrase.

   In quick fashion, he rescues a man pinned under wreckage, assists the pregnant Claire Littleton (Emilie de Ravin) and enlists Hugo "Hurley" Reyes (Jorge Garcia) to watch her, and administers CPR to Rose Henderson (L. Scott Caldwell), saving her life. "In a quick fashion" is not Encyclopedic either.

   While huddled there, a young Korean man, Jin-Soo Kwon (Daniel Dae Kim), tells his wife, Sun-Hwa Kwon (Yunjin Kim),in Korean that she should remain close to him at all times. is missing a space.

   After the monster disappears, Kate, Charlie and Jack reunite and find the pilot, his bloodied corpse suspended in a tree top. Try After the monster disappears, Kate, Charlie and Jack reunite and find the pilot's bloodied corpse suspended in a tree top. Also, this seems almost advert-like.

   in a flashback, it is revealed that Charlie had been doing drugs in the bathroom, and attempted to flush his stash but had been prevented by the sudden onset of turbulence. Why is this italicized?

   After he shows Michael the cuffs, Sawyer attacks Sayid, who he believes is an Iraqi terrorist who blew up the plane. has unclear pronouns.

   They are soon stopped by Michael and the now returned Jack. "now returned" should be "now-returned", but the wording is still awkward.

   While reading a letter sadly, Sawyer decides to go with Sayid and the group Err, what? Jump of logic again.

   He then explains that he got the gun from the body of a dead U.S. marshal. Is this important?

   A flashback shows the final moments of the flight. Kate is talking to the marshal, the same injured man to whom Jack had been tending, on the beach. On the plane, it can be seen that Kate is wearing the handcuffs that Walt found in the jungle. As the turbulence hits, the marshal is knocked unconscious by a falling suitcase. Kate uncuffs herself, and puts the marshal's oxygen mask on him before attaching her own, at which point the tail end of the plane suddenly breaks off and falls away. Why is this italicized?

   "Where is she?". should not have a period after a question mark.

   ABC had also premiered a short lived series about plane crash survivors in 1969 called The New People with the opening episode by Rod Serling. should have "The New People" italicized. You might also want to try The New People, with an opening episode written by Rod Serling. or something similar.

   Yet, before it had even been aired, Lloyd Braun was fired by executives at ABC's parent company, Disney, partly because of low ratings at the network and also because he had greenlighted such an expensive and risky project. should be Yet before the episode aired, Lloyd Braun was fired by executives at ABC's parent company, Disney, because of the network's low ratings and his role in greenlighting such an expensive and risky project.

   The world premiere of the pilot episode was on July 24, 2004 at Comic-Con International in San Diego. Try The pilot episode's world premiere was on July 24, 2004 at Comic-Con International in San Diego.

   After Matthew Fox's casting as Jack, Make this active.

   Overlinking terms like fired, supernatural, southern accent, etc.

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

   Check dead links.

   The "TV Q&A: ‘LOST’—JACK BENDER". Wizard. 2007-03-27. http://www.wizarduniverse.com/television/lost/004036830.cfm. Retrieved 2007-10-03. ref should not be in all caps.

   You link dates in refs 2 and 20, but not for others. Also, the date formats are inconsistent.

   Ref 13 is just a link.

   Is there a reference for the airdate(s)?

   Does anything cite primarily due to the expense of purchasing, shipping, and dressing the actual decommissioned aircraft body used to represent the wreckage.? Because otherwise, it seems like WP:OR.

   A great deal of the plot seems to be WP:OR too (After the initial shock of the crash passes,, Kate curiously observes Jack, while an uninterested James "Sawyer" Ford (Josh Holloway) looks on., etc).

   Example text You're going to need either a better reference or a better way to format that reference.

   The series began development in January 2004, when Lloyd Braun, head of ABC at the time, ordered an initial script from Spelling Television based on his concept of a cross between the novel Lord of the Flies, the movie Cast Away, the television series Gilligan's Island, and the popular reality show Survivor. ABC had also premiered a short lived series about plane crash survivors in 1969 called The New People with the opening episode by Rod Serling. Is there anything to reference those statements?

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

   Several scenes in the Season 3 finale, "Through the Looking Glass," were shot in Los Angeles, including a hospital set borrowed from Grey's Anatomy. How is this relevant?

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

   I'm going to assume that there simply aren't any negative reviews of this series.

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

   File:Lost102.jpg is going to need a better free use rational.

   Images need alt text.

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail: Fail

I did not reach the end of this article; there were simply too many problems. This article can conceivably pass, but it requires a thorough copyedit and a good deal of polishing. Good luck. ɳOCTURNEɳOIR _{talk // contribs} 22:50, 15 October 2009 (UTC)