Talk:Pilot (Breaking Bad)/GA1
Latest comment: 3 years ago by Tayi Arajakate in topic GA Review
GA Review
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Reviewer: Tayi Arajakate (talk · contribs) 06:08, 6 March 2021 (UTC)
Meta discussion
edit- Hello, Some Dude From North Carolina. I will be the one to review this nomination, which I will present shortly. Hopefully, my feedback will be helpful. Tayi Arajakate Talk 06:08, 6 March 2021 (UTC)
- Some Dude From North Carolina, hey, so I've completed the review and the article is more or less a good article. There are a few minor issues which might need resolving so I'm putting it on hold for the time being. Tayi Arajakate Talk 13:20, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
- Some Dude From North Carolina, I have looked over the changes and congratulations on getting this article to the status of a good article. I'll be passing it now. Tayi Arajakate Talk 20:08, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
- Some Dude From North Carolina, hey, so I've completed the review and the article is more or less a good article. There are a few minor issues which might need resolving so I'm putting it on hold for the time being. Tayi Arajakate Talk 13:20, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
Assessment
edit- Comprehension: The article is well written. Pass
- Verifiability: The article is verifiable. Pass
- Comprehensiveness: The article is adequate in its comprehensiveness. Pass
- Neutrality: The article is neutral. Pass
- Stability: The article is adequately stable. Pass
- Illustration: The article is well illustrated. Pass
Criteria | Notes | Result |
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(a) (prose) | There are some minor issues with prose. See comments below. (Resolved) | Pass |
(b) (MoS) | The article is compliant with the manual of style. | Pass |
Notes | Result |
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No issues found concerning neutrality. | Pass |
Notes | Result |
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The article is not the subject of any content disputes, edit warring or major changes at present. | Pass |
Comments
edit- Question about the image caption. It's been a long time since I saw the episode but is the caption accurate? As far as I remember, the trailer implied that he was preparing to confront the police but wasn't he simply preparing his gun to shoot himself? Tayi Arajakate Talk 06:59, 9 March 2021 (UTC)
- @Tayi Arajakate: Well, in the episode, Walter White points his gun towards the sounds of the sirens, questions this decision and attempts to commit suicide, and then points the gun again towards the sirens. I would say that per the timeline of the events, the caption is accurate. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:11, 9 March 2021 (UTC)
- Suggestions:
- The sentence "Jesse drives back to show his distributor, Krazy-8 but encounters Krazy-8's cousin, Emilio Koyama, who believes Jesse set him up during the drug bust." is a bit awkward. I would suggest either removing "show" or adding "to show the product to his distributor".
- Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:10, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
- The sentence "However, The Hollywood Reporter revealed that same year that the pilot had in fact been watched by 1.41 million people instead." is a bit awkward as well. For instance the phrase "that same year that the pilot", it should also clarify that it was later in the same year.
- Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:10, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
- The quotations could be turned down a bit, for instance at the beginning of the section on production. Some of them could be re-worked as sentences narrating what Gilligan says instead of direct quotes.
- Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:10, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
- The last paragraph is a bit too blue link intensive. Maybe it can be re-worked in a chart format.
- Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:10, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
- The part referred to in the caption should be included in the plot too.
- Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:10, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
- The article could talk a bit more about RJ Mitte's casting if that is available and if there is other information available about the production.
- Done Added information on the casting of Aaron Paul and Dean Norris. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:10, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
- Oops, I meant that for the casting for Jesse Pinkman's role, not that of Walter Jr. Since, you have added it anyways, it's done now. Tayi Arajakate Talk 20:04, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
- Done Added information on the casting of Aaron Paul and Dean Norris. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:10, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
Tayi Arajakate Talk 13:13, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
- @Tayi Arajakate: All done. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:10, 12 March 2021 (UTC)