Talk:One Time (Justin Bieber song)/GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: S Masters (talk) 17:41, 10 April 2010 (UTC)

GA review (see here for criteria)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS):

   Article is well written and complies with WP:MoS.

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

   References appear to comply with WP:RS and main statements are properly referenced.

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

   Article appears to be stable.

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

   Images are properly tagged and captioned.

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Comments: There are numerous copy edit and MoS compliance issues with this article.

• The lead must not mention anything that is not already contained in the sections - see WP:LEAD - for example, "Canadian".
• It later released via digital download in the United States and Canada on July 7, 2009, and was released in several other countries during fall 2009. - "It was released..."
• The accompanying music video features Bieber at a party, and features Usher and Bieber's friend, Ryan Butler. - This sentence should be recast to eliminate the double "features".
• The second and third paragraphs in the section on composition should be rewritten to be in the past tense.
• There is overlinking. Wikilinks should only appear on the first mention, and just once.
• Bill Lamb of About.com stated that called the song a... - Grammar problems here.
• The song quietly entered at number ninety-five... - MoS compliance. Numbers greater than nine are written numerically. This needs to be fixed throughout, including "top twenty", "top ten", "one hundred millon", etc.
• The song first debuted on the Billboard...
• It has since peaked at number fourteen. It peaked... - Rewrite to avoid duplication of "peaked".
• It debuted in Belgium (Flanders) at twenty-six and peaked at twelve on the bubbling under chart, equaling the song to peak at sixty-two. - What does "equaling the song" mean?
• It debuted in Belgium (Wallonia) tip chart... - debuted [on the]?
• The charting of the song in Europe which propelled it to chart at twenty nine on the European Hot 100 chart. - Doesn't really make sense, plus rewrite to avoid triple use of "chart".
• The music video, directed by Vashtie Kola.[29], was posted - Punctuation errors. Remove the period and shift the comma immediately after Kola.
• Internationally, he appeared on the European program The Dome... - The Dome needs to be in italics.
• The section on live performances should employ the use of semi-colons to separate the performances.
• On November 23, 2009, on the London date of the tour,...
• Originally an acoustic version... - Comma after originally.

I will allow up to seven days for all these issues to be resolved. You can contact me if you have any questions or problems.

On hold review

• "It debuted in Belgium (Flanders) at twenty-six and peaked at twelve on the bubbling under chart, equaling the song to peak at sixty-two." - I am still not clear what "equaling the song" means? Does it mean that this is equivalent to the song peaking at sixty-two?
• There are several instances where reference are placed before a period. They should be outside. And there is at least one instance where it is placed after a period, but is then followed by another period. ...making the song debut at forty-five on the Irish Singles Chart.[23]. - These need to be fixed.

Otherwise, I am happy with all the improvements made so far. I will allow more time for these final issues to be fixed, before a final review. -- S Masters (talk) 04:38, 12 April 2010 (UTC)

Fixed. Candyo32 (talk) 22:56, 12 April 2010 (UTC)

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• Unfortunately, the referencing issues have not been fixed. Following are just two that I found. There may be others. Please check each and every reference number to ensure that they have been fixed.

1. "...the song made a thirty spot jump from forty-seven to number seventeen, reaching a new peak on the chart[15]."
2. "The song has also achieved international success. It debuted in Belgium (Flanders) at twenty-six and peaked at twelve on the bubbling under chart, equivalent to peaking at sixty-two on the main chart. [19]."

• "...equivalent to peaking at sixty-two on the main chart." - I could not find 62 in the reference. How did you come to this conclusion from the reference provided?

Once again, thanks for all your hard work in making this a better article. -- S Masters (talk) 04:28, 13 April 2010 (UTC)

Im confused at the problem for #1. The source says "Also making big moves on the list due to digital sales is Justin Bieber who sees two songs make identical 30-position jumps: "One Time" (47-17) and "One Less Lonely Girl" (60-30). The former track establishes a new peak position with its climb, surpassing a No. 20 rank achieved in November." For #2 "Tip" indicated it was on the Ultratip, like the U.S. Bubbling charts, and concluded by adding the remaining numbers for the equivalent chart position. Candyo32 (talk) 02:41, 17 April 2010 (UTC)

Think everything's fixed now! Candyo32 (talk) 03:01, 17 April 2010 (UTC)

The problems with #1 and #2 have nothing to do with the references themselves. The problem is how the references are presented, i.e. [15]." which should be ."[15] and chart. [19]." which should be ."[19] - I could have done these for you but I want you to see where the problems are so that you can understand. -- S Masters (talk) 02:48, 17 April 2010 (UTC)

Final comments: After all the work done, I am now satisfied that it meets all the requirements for a Good Article, and I am happy to pass it as such. Good work! -- S Masters (talk) 04:46, 17 April 2010 (UTC)