Talk:NuScale Power/GA1

Latest comment: 8 years ago by Sturmvogel 66 in topic GA Review

GA Review edit

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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 00:25, 29 September 2015 (UTC)Reply


I'll get to this shortly.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 00:25, 29 September 2015 (UTC)Reply

  • No DABs.
  Done David King, Ethical Wiki (Talk) 15:33, 11 October 2015 (UTC)Reply
  • One dead link.
  Done I thought it might be a good red-link, but no strong opinion. David King, Ethical Wiki (Talk) 15:37, 11 October 2015 (UTC)Reply
NuScale widens lead in quest for SMR commercialisation (info) [nuclearenergyinsider.com] No, this external link is dead. Use the external link checker in the GA Toolbox in the upper right.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 20:47, 11 October 2015 (UTC)Reply
Got it. All I could find online is places that have the same dead link, so I just removed the URl. David King, Ethical Wiki (Talk) 21:09, 11 October 2015 (UTC)Reply
  • Link Limited liability company, patent, reactor vessel, funding round, Ponzi scheme,
  Done David King, Ethical Wiki (Talk) 15:34, 11 October 2015 (UTC)Reply
  • financial hardship, until new delete the comma.
  Done David King, Ethical Wiki (Talk) 15:34, 11 October 2015 (UTC)Reply
  • Add a metric conversion for all English measurements. The conversion template could be useful for you: {{template:convert}}.
  Done David King, Ethical Wiki (Talk) 15:40, 11 October 2015 (UTC)Reply
You only need to do it once for each measurement. And convert the weight of the reactor as well.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 20:47, 11 October 2015 (UTC)xt|create steam that turns a turbine, which cranks an electricity generatorReply
  Done David King, Ethical Wiki (Talk) 21:17, 11 October 2015 (UTC)Reply
  • passive water circulation techniques add a hyphen between water and circulation as they form a compound adjective.
  Done David King, Ethical Wiki (Talk) 15:41, 11 October 2015 (UTC)Reply
  • The company started making staffing and pay cuts as executives looked for new funding sources.[11][12] Most of the company's employees were laid off within a few months. Link these two sentences together with an "and".
  Done David King, Ethical Wiki (Talk) 15:41, 11 October 2015 (UTC)Reply
  • That September NuScale obtained Add comma after September.
  Done David King, Ethical Wiki (Talk) 15:42, 11 October 2015 (UTC)Reply
  • No single sentence paragraphs.
  Done If you feel strongly, I'll also consolidate the first sentence of the Reactors section to avoid a one-sentence paragraph, but I think it works very well the way it is in terms of each paragraph having a distinct topic and that one being a summary/introduction. David King, Ethical Wiki (Talk) 15:44, 11 October 2015 (UTC)Reply
I think that it flows pretty naturally into the following para and should be merged into it.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 20:47, 11 October 2015 (UTC)Reply
  Done David King, Ethical Wiki (Talk) 21:17, 11 October 2015 (UTC)Reply
  • Generally, one only link for a term. Delink subsequent usages of Nuclear Regulatory Commission, Energy Northwest, DoE.
  Done David King, Ethical Wiki (Talk) 15:45, 11 October 2015 (UTC)Reply
  • Be consistent about using title case for article titles in your references. More later.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 14:11, 11 October 2015 (UTC)Reply
  Done David King, Ethical Wiki (Talk) 15:55, 11 October 2015 (UTC)Reply


Thanks! I really enjoy thorough reviews. Eager to see any other feedback you have! David King, Ethical Wiki (Talk) 15:56, 11 October 2015 (UTC)Reply

  • Has ground been broken on the facility in Idaho yet?
Based on the wording, I don't think so. Do you think we should take it our per crystal ball? David King, Ethical Wiki (Talk) 21:27, 11 October 2015 (UTC)Reply
Probably best not to unless there's been a press release or something announcing that.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 18:56, 12 October 2015 (UTC)Reply
  • Images appropriately licensed.
  • create steam that turns a turbine, which cranks an electricity generator Link turbine and generator. Language is a little casual here; howzabout "drives an electrical generator."
  Done David King, Ethical Wiki (Talk) 21:21, 11 October 2015 (UTC)Reply
  Done David King, Ethical Wiki (Talk) 21:22, 11 October 2015 (UTC)Reply
  • Link steam generator, barge, rail car, carbon sequestration and all the locations in the Operations section if not already linked.
  Done David King, Ethical Wiki (Talk) 22:55, 12 October 2015 (UTC)Reply
Gotta be careful with links as there are of a variety of things that share the same general name. You want Steam generator (nuclear power).--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 23:08, 12 October 2015 (UTC)Reply
  • The weight of the reactor is in metric tons, not long or short tons?
  Done David King, Ethical Wiki (Talk) 22:59, 12 October 2015 (UTC)Reply
  • less time, materials and space to construct as other power sources "than" instead of "as"
  Done David King, Ethical Wiki (Talk) 22:59, 12 October 2015 (UTC)Reply
  • expanded incrementally to adjust to power needs "meet" rather than "adjust"--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 18:56, 12 October 2015 (UTC)Reply
  Done David King, Ethical Wiki (Talk) 23:00, 12 October 2015 (UTC)Reply
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