Talk:Mount Washington (Oregon)/GA1
Latest comment: 5 years ago by AhmadLX in topic GA Review
GA Review edit
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Reviewer: AhmadLX (talk · contribs) 20:11, 19 November 2018 (UTC)
I will be reviewing this. AhmadLX (talk) 20:11, 19 November 2018 (UTC)
GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria
- Is it well written?
- A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:
- 1....., and the city of Sisters is about 12 miles (19 km) from the Mount Washington Wilderness area. This is unsatisfactory for several reasons: this is 1st instance of wilderness area without description (which comes later); We should be specific about location of Mt. Washington w.r.t other reference markers, not other way around: i.e. Mt. Washington is located x km from city of Sisters. I will change this.
- 2. Opening sentence of 2nd para in section "Geography" is too long. It can be split.
- 3. Geography section is generally full of unnecessary jargon, rendering it difficult to read. I will try to improve it, but it would be better if some native speaker does it. --AhmadLX (talk) 17:16, 25 November 2018 (UTC)
- 4. There was an ice sheet between Mount Washington and Three Fingered Jack. When was it (e.g. during Pleistocene etc)?AhmadLX (talk) 19:18, 26 November 2018 (UTC)
- B. It complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation:
- A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:
- Is it verifiable with no original research?
- A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:
- B. All in-line citations are from reliable sources, including those for direct quotations, statistics, published opinion, counter-intuitive or controversial statements that are challenged or likely to be challenged, and contentious material relating to living persons—science-based articles should follow the scientific citation guidelines:
- C. It contains no original research:
- D. It contains no copyright violations nor plagiarism:
- A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:
- Is it broad in its coverage?
- A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:
- B. It stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style):
- Article mixes the subject with Mount Washington Wilderness, despite having separate sub-section on the same. At places the article seems to be about the latter. Sections Mineral and geothermal potential and Recreation are relevant to Mount Washington Wilderness only and not to Mountain Peak itself. Since we have separate article on Wilderness thing, these sections in this article should be shortened and merged into sub-section Wilderness.AhmadLX (talk) 19:17, 23 November 2018 (UTC)
- @Ceranthor: plz have a look at changes I have made. Also, I suggest all sections relevant to wilderness area ( i.e. Ecology, Mineral Potential, and Recreation) be merged (as sub-sections) into one section Wilderness area, that comes at the end of the article after Eruption history. You can have a look at that in my sandbox.--AhmadLX (talk) 17:16, 24 November 2018 (UTC)
- @AhmadLX: Sorry for the delayed response; I took the weekend off from editing. I disagree about shortening the wilderness section; I've included similar sections in other volcano FA and GAs I've written and don't see why it's so unrelated that it warrants being shortened or combined into another section. I'll get to the rest of your points ASAP. ceranthor 22:50, 25 November 2018 (UTC)
- In my view, Mt. Washington Wilderness is a different topic, that is why we have a separate article for it. Unless we are up to duplicating the material, the article on Mt. Washington should detail stuff directly related to mountain itself, while material on Wilderness, since it is not main topic of the article, should be summarized into one section, any further details should be transferred to its own existing article. That is what Summary style means in my opinion. AhmadLX (talk) 18:46, 26 November 2018 (UTC)
- @AhmadLX: Fair enough. I agree on the potential section, but the wilderness section is standard for all mountain articles, so I would prefer to keep that as its own section. I moved the geothermal/mineral potential to a section on the wilderness itself. ceranthor 18:54, 26 November 2018 (UTC)
- Looks good now. I wasn't arguing that wilderness section should be removed. I meant that other sections relevant to wilderness should be made subsections of Wilderness, so that everything is in one place, and that it should be moved down the article so that sections are in logical order. But I get the point of keeping Ecology as separate section. AhmadLX (talk) 19:18, 26 November 2018 (UTC)
- @AhmadLX: Fair enough. I agree on the potential section, but the wilderness section is standard for all mountain articles, so I would prefer to keep that as its own section. I moved the geothermal/mineral potential to a section on the wilderness itself. ceranthor 18:54, 26 November 2018 (UTC)
- In my view, Mt. Washington Wilderness is a different topic, that is why we have a separate article for it. Unless we are up to duplicating the material, the article on Mt. Washington should detail stuff directly related to mountain itself, while material on Wilderness, since it is not main topic of the article, should be summarized into one section, any further details should be transferred to its own existing article. That is what Summary style means in my opinion. AhmadLX (talk) 18:46, 26 November 2018 (UTC)
- @AhmadLX: Sorry for the delayed response; I took the weekend off from editing. I disagree about shortening the wilderness section; I've included similar sections in other volcano FA and GAs I've written and don't see why it's so unrelated that it warrants being shortened or combined into another section. I'll get to the rest of your points ASAP. ceranthor 22:50, 25 November 2018 (UTC)
- A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:
- Is it neutral?
- It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:
- It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:
- Is it stable?
- It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:
- It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:
- Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?
- A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
- B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
1. Caption to this reads: "Mount Washington from Big Lake." I don't know where this Big Lake is. Perhaps something like "... as seen from the west "? or whichever direction this lake is in.- I think I fixed this. It appears to be to the east. ceranthor 19:23, 20 November 2018 (UTC)
- 2. A local topography map would be a good addition (optional though).
- Overall:
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