Talk:Morgan Barron

GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:Morgan Barron/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Lee Vilenski (talk · contribs) 16:48, 12 August 2020 (UTC)

Hello, I am planning on reviewing this article for GA Status, over the next couple of days. Thank you for nominating the article for GA status. I hope I will learn some new information, and that my feedback is helpful.

If nominators or editors could refrain from updating the particular section that I am updating until it is complete, I would appreciate it to remove a edit conflict. Please address concerns in the section that has been completed above (If I've raised concerns up to references, feel free to comment on things like the lede.)

I generally provide an overview of things I read through the article on a first glance. Then do a thorough sweep of the article after the feedback is addressed. After this, I will present the pass/failure. I will use strikethrough tags when concerns are met. Even if something is obvious why my concern is met, please leave a message as courtesy.

Best of luck! you can also use the {{done}} tag to state when something is addressed. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)}

Please let me know after the review is done, if you were happy with the review! Obviously this is regarding the article's quality, however, I want to be happy and civil to all, so let me know if I have done a good job, regardless of the article's outcome.

Immediate Failures

• It is a long way from meeting any one of the six good article criteria -
• It contains copyright infringements -
• It has, or needs, cleanup banners that are unquestionably still valid. These include{{cleanup}}, {{POV}}, {{unreferenced}} or large numbers of {{citation needed}}, {{clarify}}, or similar tags. (See also {{QF-tags}}). -
• It is not stable due to edit warring on the page. -

Prose

Lede

• Is a one sentence paragraph necessary? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 13:58, 18 August 2020 (UTC)
  •  Done
• Why don't we link ice hockey? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 13:58, 18 August 2020 (UTC)
  •  Done
• link Nova Scotia Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 13:58, 18 August 2020 (UTC)
  •  Done
• The initials NSMMHL are pointless, as you don't refer using this text again in the lede. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 13:58, 18 August 2020 (UTC)
  •  Done
• Link Ontario? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 13:58, 18 August 2020 (UTC)
  •  Done
• drafted 174th overall by the New York Rangers in the 2017 NHL Entry Draft. - no need for "drafted", perhaps "picked" to avoid repetition. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 13:58, 18 August 2020 (UTC)
  •  Done
• Lede could probably do with a little more to it. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 13:58, 18 August 2020 (UTC)

General

• No statistics tables? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:08, 18 August 2020 (UTC)
  • Lee Vilenski,  Done. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 01:34, 19 August 2020 (UTC)
• Ref two should be used after the first sentence, as it covers all the info. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:08, 18 August 2020 (UTC)
  •  Done
• You need to be a bit careful referring to the game as "hockey", as there is a similar game called field hockey. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:08, 18 August 2020 (UTC)
  •  Done
• links from lede also apply to the body, so you'll need to relink Nova Scotia on first use, etc. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:08, 18 August 2020 (UTC)
  •  Done
• Not a part of this review - but do they really call junior ice hockey "midget ice hockey?" Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:08, 18 August 2020 (UTC)
  • For now, see [1]. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 01:28, 19 August 2020 (UTC)
• link association football. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:08, 18 August 2020 (UTC)
  •  Done
• "from the minute we drafted him, the more we get to know him, the more we like him. Not just on ice, but off ice. How he handles himself at the rink and away from the rink is impressive." - feels like a big ol' pile of waft to me. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:08, 18 August 2020 (UTC)
  •  Done
• Do we have a glossary entry for "power forward"? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:08, 18 August 2020 (UTC)
  • No. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 01:28, 19 August 2020 (UTC)
• Same for "puck". Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:08, 18 August 2020 (UTC)
  •  Done
• Division 1 Soccer - is this a proper noun? Can we link it? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:08, 18 August 2020 (UTC)
  •  Done
• Link Most Valuable Player. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:08, 18 August 2020 (UTC)
  •  Done
• "it was really exciting...it's obviously an exciting atmosphere out there and something I've never experienced before. So to be able to bury one out there, it's a lot of fun to be able to help the team get a win there and get us started off on the right foot." - just because he said this doesn't mean its encyclopedic. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:08, 18 August 2020 (UTC)
  •  Done
• Barron ended the season leading team rookies - this reads wrong. I'm assuming this means he lead all players who were playing their first seasons in the league? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:08, 18 August 2020 (UTC)
  •  Done
• Greg Ratushny Award - do we have no article on this? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:08, 18 August 2020 (UTC)
  • No because it's a school-specific award
• Link sophomore. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:08, 18 August 2020 (UTC)
  •  Done
• link/glossary "faceoff". Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:08, 18 August 2020 (UTC)
  •  Done
• team in goals with 15 and points with 34 - leading the team with both 15 goals and 34 points. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:08, 18 August 2020 (UTC)
  •  Done
• Link 2009–10 NCAA Division I men's ice hockey season Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:08, 18 August 2020 (UTC)
  •  Done

GA Review

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Review meta comments

• I'll begin the review as soon as I can! If you fancy returning the favour, I have outstanding GA and FA nominations that require reviewing at WP:GAN and WP:FAC, respectively. I'd be very grateful if you were to complete one of these, however it's definitely not mandatory. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)}
  • On hold - it's mostly jargon, additional links and such here. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:09, 18 August 2020 (UTC)