Talk:Miranda Brawn

Latest comment: 2 years ago by DillonPalm in topic [Untitled]

[Untitled] edit

Hi all, looking forward to hearing recommendations on how can I improve the article. I have written it from a neutral point of view, creating an advertisement wasn't my intention at all. I think I verified all statements of the page with reliable sources, and I only mentioned facts that I found during my online research. I would like to say thanks to User:MB for their contribution and suggestions, I have removed the word "expert" from the phrase "media contributor". As User:MB mentioned in our convo on their talk page, some further details such as date of birth, birthplace or undergrad education would be helpful, but I could not find any info about those, and I think the article is still relevant in this form. Looking forward to receiving suggestions about how can we improve the page. Thanks, DillonPalm (talk) 01:29, 30 November 2021 (UTC)Reply

Following the remarks of User:Giraffer I took out the following parts:
"Her career background includes being a financial executive as an investment banker and a hedge fund sales trader."
"She also serves on their Audit and Risk, Governance, Nomination, and Renumeration committees while leading their diversity, equity, inclusion, and ESG initiatives."
These details might not be necessary to understand the core of the topic, and as User:Giraffer mentioned they made the article sound similar to a CV, so I deleted them. If anyone has further suggestions on how can I keep improving the article, please let me know, otherwise please consider removing the "advertisement" tag. Thanks, DillonPalm (talk) 21:34, 1 December 2021 (UTC)Reply

DillonPalm, My advice would be to remove the tag yourself since there has been no further comment here. But only do so if you do not have a Conflict of Interest with the subject of this article. If you have no relationship to the subject and are not trying to promote them in anyway (read the guideline if you are unsure), then remove the tag. If you have a conflict, it's still permissible to edit the article so long as you explain the conflict, but let someone else more neutral remove the tag. If you have a conflict and don't declare it, you could be blocked from editing. MB 22:53, 5 January 2022 (UTC)Reply
Thanks, as there were no further comments or requests in the past month, I will remove the tags. I do not have any personal interest in the article, I don't know her in person, trying to promote her or anything like that. Thanks for the comment. DillonPalm (talk) 16:59, 7 January 2022 (UTC)Reply