Talk:Matt Bevin/GA1
Latest comment: 8 years ago by Coemgenus in topic GA Review
GA Review edit
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Reviewer: Coemgenus (talk · contribs) 14:22, 12 May 2016 (UTC)
Checklist edit
- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
- a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Pass/Fail:
Comments edit
- Initial comments
- Images are all properly licensed
- Article is stable
- NPOV is good. At the end, I couldn't tell what your opinion of Bevin was, which is what we should be going for here.
- Lede
Not sure you need "since December 8, 2015" in the first sentence.
- Marriage and family
"and opened to the public following an "overwhelming response from the public"" is a little repetitive. "the public...the public"
- Business career
"After transitioning to the Army Reserve..." Maybe "After leaving active duty..."? Not necessary, I just think it sounds better.- "Bevin is also a partner at Waycross Partners..." Is this still true?
- Bevin's Tea Party support
"During the campaign, Bevin staunchly criticized..." could probably lose "staunchly"
- Result and aftermath
- The first two sentences are kind of irrelevant, now that we know what happened.
- I thought it was important to note how common the belief was that Bevin was so far behind he would, and should, drop out. If, after reading my rationale, you don't agree, I'd be OK with dropping it. The article is pretty long as it is. Acdixon (talk · contribs) 11:46, 14 May 2016 (UTC)
- I'm kind of shocked that the REINS Act has no article, but I can't find one either. Hopefully your redlink will inspire someone to create one.
- I'll finish the rest of this tonight. --Coemgenus (talk) 20:41, 13 May 2016 (UTC)
- Thanks for tackling this one. I know it's a beast. If you have suggestions for shortening it, please share. There's already been some talk page chatter that it's too long, especially after we have to add information about 4 (or 8) years in office. I'm too close to the prose to prune it properly, I think. I'll try to stay on top of this review, at least. Been a busy few days, but I should have time tomorrow to attend to whatever else you find. Acdixon (talk · contribs) 11:46, 14 May 2016 (UTC)
- 2015 gubernatorial primary
- In the first paragraph, you could reduce the first two sentence to "Bevin remained politically active after his defeat by McConnell, and an email to his followers calling on Kentucky Governor Steve Beshear, a Democrat, to denounce new carbon regulations issued by the EPA fueled speculation that Bevin would seek the Republican gubernatorial nomination in 2015 or Rand Paul's Senate seat in 2016 if Paul's expected presidential bid kept him from running for re-election." It's still a long sentence, so if you want to break it in two, that makes sense, too.
- Result and aftermath
- A little chart of the vote totals wouldn't be out of place here.
- Governor of Kentucky
- Eventually, if not right now, it might make sense to retitle the "Political career" section as "Political campaigns" or something, and raise "Governor of Kentucky" to a level-2 heading. Not sure if that's justified yet.
- At some point, you stopped capitalizing Kynect. Not sure which is right, but it should be consistent.
- That's all I have. It's a nice article, that will make a good addition to the collection. --Coemgenus (talk) 13:21, 14 May 2016 (UTC)
- Promoted
- OK, I think we've covered everything. I'm glad to promote. Nice working with you again. --Coemgenus (talk) 12:58, 15 May 2016 (UTC)
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