Talk:Long Ya Men/GA1

GA Review

This is a nice short article, that fulfills all of the Ga requirements save for having a few readability issues that must be fixed. Firstly, punctuation in references must always be within quotes.

Sim, Glenys. "Dragon's tooth replica to mark anniversary of Chinese explorer", The Straits Times, March 23, 2005. This is wrong. Sim, Glenys. "Dragon's tooth replica to mark anniversary of Chinese explorer," The Straits Times, March 23, 2005. This is right.

This also goes for the references with commas and quotes. Everything must be inside the quotes. Be consistent in writing centuries as numbers or words. Use either 14th century or fourteenth century, but not both.

I thank u for your time & review on this GA nomination. Fyi, the citation format I used for all my references to date is based on the citation template, e.g. Template:Cite news. As such, all its punctuation are auto generated as per template format. u may want to read a previous discussion and examples shown here-- Aldwinteo 03:50, 2 December 2007 (UTC)

Yes, you are correct in saying that wikipedia says the punctuation should be outside of the quotes. I will say that MLA and Chicago styles do not do this, so I think wikipedia is wrong. However, I can't fault you for following the guidelines, so you don't have to change anything. Zeus1234 09:17, 2 December 2007 (UTC)

There are also a few awkward sentences. "She was transformed into a pillar of salt when she disobeyed divine orders not to look back at the destruction of Sodom, which she was allowed to flee from." This sentence is awkward with the 'flee from' part. "The passageway was however abandoned and forgotten in the seventeenth century, when modern European sailors preferred the wider and more open Main Straits south of Pulau Satamu where Raffles Lighthouse stands today" This sentence is a run-on. "It was William Farquhar, the first British Resident and Commandant of Singapore, wrote to Raffles then in Bencoolen on 2 September 1819, that he founded a new harbour west of the settlement" I don't understand what you are trying to say in this sentence. I fixed the rest of the problem sentences myself. Please fix these problems and then the article will be promoted. Zeus1234 22:42, 1 December 2007 (UTC)

 Done: Text rephrased. -- Aldwinteo 03:50, 2 December 2007 (UTC)

Thank u for your speedy review & passing this article as a 'Good Article'. Rgds -- Aldwinteo 17:53, 2 December 2007 (UTC)