Talk:Lighter (Nathan Dawe song)

GA Review

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 09:57, 27 January 2021 (UTC)

Good Article review progress box Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Haven't reviewed one of yours for a while; will take this on! --K. Peake 09:57, 27 January 2021 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

• Remove rap house from the infobox per WP:STICKTOSOURCE

 Done

• "a guest appearance from" → "a guest appearance by"

 Done

• Mention that it was released as a standalone single

 Done

• "It is a house track. The song's lyrics are" → "A house track, its lyrics are"

 Done

• Mention that it was dubbed as mentioned by Promonews

 Done

• "and it also reached the" → "and also reached the"

 Done

• "stars Nathan Dawe and KSI" → "stars Dawe and KSI"

 Done

• "starting out completely" → "though they start out completely"

 Done

• "both sports, but improving as" → "both sports but improve as"

 Done

• Mention the Top of the Pops performance as that special is notable for the lead

 Done

Writing and production

• "wrote and recorded the song" → "wrote and recorded "Lighter""

 Done

• The other collaborators mentioned in this sentence are not referenced by the source

 Done

• "at the time."" → "at the time"."

 Done

• "She had a" → Dawe recalled: "She had a"

 Done

• "They sent the song to" → "She sent the song to"

 Done

• Remove introduction to who Dawe is since we have already done this in the lead

 Done

• "wished him luck" → "wished [him] luck" because the quote does not say that

 Done

• Target single to Single (music)

 Done

• Remove the commas around "Flowers" and add the release year in brackets

 Done

• "which featured British rapper" → "which features British rapper"

 Done

• Remove introduction to who KSI is per my earlier comment, but keep the target

 Done

• "He explained, "It took me" → "He explained that "it took [him]"

 Done

• "write the verse."" → "write the verse"." per MOS:QUOTE

 Done

• Remove target on fan base

 Done

• "feel-good vibe"." → "feel-good vibe.""

 Done

Music and lyrics

• Remove target on rap since the term does not always refer to hip hop

 Done

• Further information can be added to this section from 5, 6 and 16

 Done

• The second sentence is unsourced

 Done

Release and promotion

• Remove target on single

 Done

• "and the song was" → "and "Lighter" was"

 Done

• No source is added for the digital download and streaming release

 Not done use a ref name from the release history table --K. Peake 14:51, 28 January 2021 (UTC)

• Why are the Atlantic and Warner labels listed differently in the body than in the infobox and lead?

 Done

• Target live streamed to Livestreaming

 Done

• Move the other live performances to being after this one in the same para

 Done

• Target acoustic to Acoustic music

 Done

• Remove "on 28 August" since we can tell that's the release date

 Done

 Not done --K. Peake 14:51, 28 January 2021 (UTC)

• "This version credits" → "The version credits"

 Done

• Remove "instead of his verse..." because the brand new part is too similar to that

 Done

• "for the acoustic version of the song" → "for the acoustic version"

 Done

• "which features new verses" → "that features new verses"

 Done

• "on 21 September 2020. A remix by" → "on 21 September, while one by"

 Done

 Partly done you missed the removal of the year --K. Peake 14:51, 28 January 2021 (UTC)

Critical reception

• Retitle to Reception, as this will be more than reviews

 Done

• Mention that it was dubbed as such by the staff of Promonews

 Done

• Sure you can't add any more reviews; this is awfully short right now?

 Done

• Remove wikilink on piano

 Done

• Add the accolade as a separate para here to split from reviews

 Done

 Partly done you forgot to place in a separate para --K. Peake 14:51, 28 January 2021 (UTC)

Music video

• "The music video was" → "The video was"

 Done

• "The group challenge each other to" → "KSI challenges his fellow group members to"

 Done

• Remove wikilink on basketball

 Done

• Remove target on football

 Done

 Not done --K. Peake 14:51, 28 January 2021 (UTC)

• "a bloopers video, released" → "a bloopers video being released"

 Done

• "on 14 August 2020." → "one week later."

 Done

 Not done --K. Peake 14:51, 28 January 2021 (UTC)

Credits and personnel

• Italicise Promonews

 Done

Commercial performance

• "both artists' first song" → "both Dawe and KSI's first song"

 Done

• "The song spent a total" → "It lasted for a total"

 Done

• Remove the 26 weeks part since that is not sourced

 Done

 Not done --K. Peake 14:51, 28 January 2021 (UTC)

• "40th-highest-selling and the 32nd-most-downloaded" → "40th highest-selling and 32nd most-downloaded"

 Done

• Only [29] is needed at the end of the sentence

 Done

• "The song also debuted" → "The song further debuted"

 Done

Live performances

• Since the number of performances here is only two, move to release and promotion like what I said earlier

 Done

Accolades

• Write one in prose since this is only one award; hence the move to reception because a section is not needed

 Done

Credits and personnel

• Change KSI's vocals to featured artist, plus swap with songwriter in the order and he should be after Tre Jean-Marie
• Ella Henderson should be one below KSI and swap vocals with songwriter in the order

 Done

 Partly done you should follow songwriter with vocals in the personnel's respective credits --K. Peake 14:51, 28 January 2021 (UTC)

Charts

Weekly charts

• Wikilink Billboard Global Excl. U.S.

 Done

 Not done see MOS:LINK2SECT --K. Peake 14:51, 28 January 2021 (UTC)

Year-end charts

• Good

Certifications

• Good

Release history

• Again, which version of the labels listed is correct?

 Done

See also

• Good

References

• Copyvio score looks pretty good at 25.4%; ignore the flagged URL because that is not cited anywhere here
• Make sure all of these are archived by using the tool

 Done

• Cite Official Charts Company as publisher instead for refs 1, 27 and 36

 Done

• Fix MOS:QWQ issues with ref 3

 Done

• Cite Capital FM as publisher instead for ref 4

 Done

• Cite last name followed by first for Nathan Dawe on refs 7, 8, 11, 12 and 19

 Done

• Do this for ref 9 as well but fix MOS:CAPS issues too

 Done

• Fix MOS:QWQ issues with ref 14 and cite GRM Daily as publisher instead

 Done

• Fix MOS:CAPS issues with ref 18

 Done

• Cite Tidal as publisher instead for ref 38

 Done

• Cite Ultratop as publisher instead for ref 39

 Done

• WP:OVERLINK of Radiomonitor on ref 45

 Done

• Cite Apple Music as publisher instead for refs 50, 52, 53, 54 and 55, plus remove Spotify since it is unreliable and replace with other AM citations

 Done

 Not done --K. Peake 14:51, 28 January 2021 (UTC)

• WP:OVERLINK of Capital FM on ref 51

 Done

External links

• Good

Final comments and verdict

•  On hold until all of the issues are fixed; your writing skills are improving but I have noticed throughout these reviews that you do not add enough info to comp. --K. Peake 17:46, 27 January 2021 (UTC)

Timwikisidemen You have still not removed the introductions to who KSI and Dawe are in the opening section, nor have you added "Dawe recalled" in the area I suggested or removed the verse-chorus form unsourced sentence. These are changes I have already noticed you've missed; fix these and check through to make sure you haven't forgotten even more. --K. Peake 07:52, 28 January 2021 (UTC)

Timwikisidemen I had a look through and planked the respective partly and not done templates on anywhere changes are still required. --K. Peake 14:51, 28 January 2021 (UTC)

Timwikisidemen Thank you for all of the fixes you have made, I advise to look through all of the suggested changes more than once in the future to check you have definitely done them. ✓ Pass, but I did copy edit slightly where some issues remain! --K. Peake 20:44, 28 January 2021 (UTC)