Talk:Kanye Zone

GA Review

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Reviewer: EditorE (talk · contribs) 03:15, 15 September 2013 (UTC)

REVIEW

Alright. Here we go.

• Lead looks fine, but I think it still could be expanded a bit more.
• In Kanye Zone --> Since readers will already know the gameplay section is talking about the game, we can just cut this.
• The first sentence in the development section seems overly long. I'd suggest splitting it.
• Also in the development section, "Creator Michael Frederickson" --> "Frederickson".
• In the release section, "Although two million games had been played in under a month, the game was not very profitable; Frederickson said "Kanye Zone took us forever and we made like $8"" --> "Although two million games had been played in under a month, the game was not very profitable, as the creators made only eight dollars off the game."
• Sorry if I could be wrong but does the "The game was also featured by The Huffington Post[1] and New York magazine's Vulture.[13]" part seem any trival?
• Date for most of the refs are not displayed. Please fix this.

Otherwise, I don't think much will need to be done for this to be a good article, and I'll be happy to pass this once these problems are fixed. Great work. 和DITOREtails 03:15, 15 September 2013 (UTC)

Response

• Lead expanded and split into two paragraphs.
• Done.
• Done.
• Done.
• Done.
• Removed.
• Dates added.

Thanks for the review! ajmint (talk•edits) 12:39, 15 September 2013 (UTC)

• Good Job, my friend. May I make one more comment that the word "described" is used two times in the second paragraph of the release section. Please try to solve this issue, and we'll be passing before the zone gets us! 和DITOREtails 13:12, 15 September 2013 (UTC)
• Passing! YAY!!! 和DITOREtails 13:26, 15 September 2013 (UTC)
  • Thanks! ajmint (talk•edits) 13:28, 15 September 2013 (UTC)