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  This article is or was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment. Further details are available on the course page. Peer reviewers: Raoul.duke, Kingwhale.

Above undated message substituted from Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org assignment by PrimeBOT (talk) 23:31, 17 January 2022 (UTC)Reply

Raoul.duke peer edit notes

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This is a well informed Wikipedia article. I have a few ideas to liven it up. First, expand your introduction section and biographical section, if you can. Where was Jules Rosskam born, for example? I moved some of your career section can be moved into your lead to beef it up with more details. The intro section will help hook your readers. Next, watch your spelling (I cleaned it up). Maybe write the sentences in your word processor first and copy them over; make sure that your spellcheck is on to prevent typos. Also, there is no awards section. Ensure there were no awards won by your filmmaker. On the positive side, you have an excellent variety of academic sources as “References.” Also, add more relevant categories to the bottom of the article. Also, are the references to ”trans” in the article referencing transvestite, transsexual, or transgender? I moved one of your sentences to the lead—it contains the note “citation needed.” I do not think the sentence requires a citation but I will leave the choice to you. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Raoul.duke (talkcontribs) 20:58, 9 November 2016 (UTC)Reply

This is a well written article and very informative. a couple things to change, firstly add more to her biography like her birth, early life, and what lead her towards her career. You added where some of her more significant screening took place which is above and beyond, but did not make any mention of any awards or honours, you can add a section for that is she has won any awards. Also if she is working on any future projects, it would be nice to see those input as well.Other than that I thought it was a very informative article. Kingwhale (talk) 01:10, 10 November 2016 (UTC)Reply

MaggieCD Peer edit Response

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Raoul.duke; thank you for the help with the issue of typos and grammar. Unfortunately there was no good reliable source that could indicate any awards won, I followed a source from another Wiki page on a film of his but the reference was not reliable therefore I cannot have an awards section. In my readings of the references most state "trans" narrative in reference to his passion in educating his audience on all topics of trans such as transvestite, transsexual, or transgender.

Kingwhale; Just a quick note Jules Rosskam is a male as stated through the context of the pronoun "he" I use throughout the article. Again unfortunately there are no sources besides his own webpage that discuss his life, ie; birth, childhood ect. and since a personal website is not a reliable source I could not add such information regarding the earlier years of his life or even the current personal information of his life since it has not been noted in any sources I find. What I have written in this article really is all I could find on the projects, life, and career of Jules Rosskam.