Talk:Joseph J. Himmel/GA1

Latest comment: 4 years ago by The Rambling Man in topic GA Review

GA Review edit

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 08:52, 18 August 2019 (UTC)Reply


Comments

  • "the northeast United States " why just northeast in the pipe when the link is simply Northeastern United States?
  • "in Annapolis, Maryland to" comma before to.
  • "January 16, 1855 in" comma after 1855.
  • "a Mason Scholarship" what's this?
    • Truthfully, I have no idea. It was important enough that the reference mentioned it, so I figured I'd include it. Ergo Sum 19:39, 18 August 2019 (UTC)Reply
  • "the classics" I would think it more useful to link this than, say, Germany...
  • "in Worcester, Massachusetts a year " comma before a.
  • "August 27, 1885 by " etc.
  • Is Himmel really "anglicized"? I thought it meant heaven?
    • I'm not expert in German, but I think you're right. I believe it's anglicized in the way that many foreign surnames were shortened in the United States to reduce their foreign-ness. Ergo Sum 19:42, 18 August 2019 (UTC)Reply
  • "During his time on the mission band" and "over the course of his eventual twenty years as a missionary" - both in the same sentence seem unneccessary?
    • Rephrased by utilizing the ever-useful semi-colon. Ergo Sum 19:43, 18 August 2019 (UTC)Reply
  • What is tertianship?
  • You link prez of Georgetown after already mentioning the position...
    • If you are referring to the lede, I do so because linking president as opposed to Georgetown would be unwieldy in the first paragraph. Ergo Sum 19:44, 18 August 2019 (UTC)Reply
  • "November 3, 1924 at " comma
  • Looks like em-dashes rather than en-dashes in the year ranges in the suc-box.

Otherwise, as usual, a top notch piece of work. On hold for the moment. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 19:12, 18 August 2019 (UTC)Reply

Ergo Sum I've responded to your queries. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 19:51, 18 August 2019 (UTC)Reply
@The Rambling Man: Likewise. I've resolved all the outstanding issues, I believe.
All good, I've promoted now. Just FYI, adding a "ping" after the event doesn't seem to work. I think you need to add a new signed comment to ensure it gets through to me. Cheers. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 07:54, 19 August 2019 (UTC)Reply
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