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In reading the lead before any other part, the connection between the executive council resigning and Rolph helping to plan the rebellion is not clear, if there even is meant to be a link. Could the connection between the two events be emphasised further in the lead or if necessary a separate reason for Rolph's involvement in the rebellion be given?
I moved the executive council sentence to the previous paragraph to avoid linking the two events. I added information that Mackenzie convinced Rolph to support the rebellion, in exchange for Rolph becoming president of the new state. Z1720 (talk) 00:11, 11 July 2021 (UTC)Reply
In 1824, Rolph was elected to the Legislative Assembly of Upper Canada to represent Middlesex. When he was elected in 1836, the constituency boundaries changed and the constituency was called Norfolk, and he was elected to the Legislative Assembly of Upper Canada. In 1841, the colony of Upper Canada merged with Lower Canada to create the Province of Canada, so when Rolph was elected in his old constituency of Norfolk, he was elected to the Legislative Assembly of the Province of Canada. Z1720 (talk) 00:11, 11 July 2021 (UTC)Reply
The number of children in the infobox needs citing as the information doesn't appear elsewhere
This is in the body as, "In 1834, he married Grace Haines; they would have three sons and a daughter." and cited to two sources.
"He was baptised at Seyntemaryes parish church" - could the location ofthe church be given? As it is the name alone isn't very useful
Source doesn't have additional information. Z1720 (talk) 00:11, 11 July 2021 (UTC)Reply
First mentions of New York and Upper Canada (beginning of second paragraph) need links
Per MOS:OVERLINK I don't think New York should be linked, although I specified that he travelled to the city. Wikilinked Upper Canada. Z1720 (talk) 00:11, 11 July 2021 (UTC)Reply
"After the Battle of Queenston Heights, American forces released him in a prisoner exchange" - could you provide a date for his exchange/arrival in Canada?
Source doesn't give dates. Z1720 (talk) 15:30, 11 July 2021 (UTC)Reply
Link Port Talbot to Port Talbot, Ontario at first mention at end of second paragraph
Done
"Rolph was paymaster for the 2nd Norfolk militia" > "Rolph became paymaster for the 2nd Norfolk Militia"
"Conservatives" is used in paragraph two and "Tory politicians" used in paragraph three. Recommend only one version is used throughout.
Changed to Tory, as persons at that time were more likely to be called Tories. I will search the whole article to replace instances of this. Z1720 (talk) 16:39, 11 July 2021 (UTC)Reply
"He decided not to run in the 1830 Upper Canada election" - this seems like quite a big decision, do we know his reasoning?
The source only speculates, which I don't want to add to the article. Z1720 (talk) 16:39, 11 July 2021 (UTC)Reply
The lead states that he "examined the feasibility of creating the City of Toronto" while in this section it is described as "appointed to a committee to examine the incorporation of York into the city of Toronto" which sounds as if the city already existed, needs clarification one way or the other
Changed "into" to "to become". Z1720 (talk) 17:43, 11 July 2021 (UTC)Reply
First mention of aldermen on second line needs linking to Alderman
Done
"He ran to be Toronto's first mayor, but the city's aldermen chose William Lyon Mackenzie" - is it possible to provide a particular reason for his defeat?
Added reasoning from the source.
Another Cholera outbreak! As previous, could it be noted whether either of these were part of the 1826–1837 cholera pandemic?
Lots of cholera outbreaks! (Well, just two, afaik) they were probably part of the pandemic, don't know how to integrate the link into the article. Z1720 (talk) 17:43, 11 July 2021 (UTC)Reply
Perhaps introduce briefly who Bond Head was at the beginning
Outlined his job title.
Why was Rolph chosen as Baldwin's replacement - was it because of their similar leanings? Might be worth elaborating on the choice
I added some language that said Bond Head wanted moderate reformers. Z1720 (talk) 17:55, 11 July 2021 (UTC)Reply
"This led the public to believe council supported" > "This led the public to believe the council supported"
This has already been fixed in the article. Z1720 (talk) 17:55, 11 July 2021 (UTC)Reply
Were any of Bond Head's unilateral decisions particularly noteworthy or was it a build up of small annoyances and changes as the text currently suggests?
None of them are noteworthy for Rolph's biography because Bond Head did reject or oppose a policy that Rolph championed (mostly because Rolph wasn't on the council long enough to propose his own policy agenda.)
The beginning of the last paragraph needs adjusting to highlight that the tactics Rolph was objecting to were Bond Head's
Were the aims of the Lower and Upper Canadian rebellions the same? A small section explaining what exactly their largescale goals were would be useful
No, and I think that's outside the scope of this article. Rolph was not involved in the Lower Canada Rebellion. Z1720 (talk) 18:10, 11 July 2021 (UTC)Reply
Why is it important that the support of Thomas David Morrison be noted?
Upon reflection, it might not be necessary to mention here, so I removed it.
What was the provenance of Anthony Van Egmond? His wikipedia page suggests he was Dutch.
Provenance is sketchy, so I changed it to military officer in Napoleonic Wars. Z1720 (talk) 18:10, 11 July 2021 (UTC)Reply
Where was "Montgomery's Tavern"?
North of Toronto, clarified in the article.
"After learning that the Lower Canada Rebellion failed" > "After learning that the Lower Canada Rebellion had failed"
Done
"and dispersed the men he gathered in Toronto" > "and dispersed the men he had gathered"; repeating Toronto here again seems superfluous
Done
Could an explanation be given as to why Rolph felt he had to flee to the United States upon Morrison's arrest?
Adding info that he was scared he was also going to be arrested.
One assumes his expulsion from the legislature was in absentia and more of a formality than anything else? Worth emphasising
No, he was expelled specifically for helping to plan the rebellion. Clarified in the article. Z1720 (talk) 18:10, 11 July 2021 (UTC)Reply
He's not mentioned anywhere else in the article, so I removed him. Z1720 (talk) 18:17, 11 July 2021 (UTC)Reply
The nature of Van Rensselaer's invasion needs to be explained; was it a largescale attack that could have made considerable gains, etc?
Do you mean his invasion of Navy Island? If so, I added that Van Rensselaer was able to occupy the island. Z1720 (talk) 18:17, 11 July 2021 (UTC)Reply
Who are these Patriot troops and where do they come from?
Clarified that Patriot troops were mostly from American Hunters' Lodges
"He continued his medical school in Rochester" - this sounds like the Rochester school had already been particularly mentioned but I don't believe it has been in as many words
Clarified that he was re-opening his medical school, the one that he established in Toronto. Z1720 (talk) 18:17, 11 July 2021 (UTC)Reply
While Rolph was in the United States, the colonies of Upper Canada and Lower Canada merged to become the Province of Canada, and their legislative assemblies merged to create the Legislative Assembly of the Province of Canada. I changed the wikilink to clarify this. Z1720 (talk) 18:37, 11 July 2021 (UTC)Reply
"He gave the administrative tasks of running his medical school to Dr. W. T. Aikens" - who was Aikens? If the point is that Rolph delegated some control of his school upon his return to politics then this can be done without introducing a seemingly unnecessary extra name
Removed the name. Z1720 (talk) 18:37, 11 July 2021 (UTC)Reply
A few words pointing out who exactly Hincks and Boulton were would be useful in the second paragraph
Gave Hincks's job title as co-premier of Canada, removed the first Boulton's name, added job title of the second Boulton. Z1720 (talk) 18:37, 11 July 2021 (UTC)Reply
Are HJ Boulton and WJ Boulton connected?
They were both legislators, but I removed HJ so this is moot. Z1720 (talk) 18:37, 11 July 2021 (UTC)Reply
"who opposed reformer policies" - should "reformer" be capitalised here?
I think that, since this sentence is referring to the movement, and not the political party, it is supposed to be lowercase. Z1720 (talk) 18:37, 11 July 2021 (UTC)Reply
The last sentence of the Return to politics section seems redundant, his opposition to parliament at this time has already been established
Removed
Is "the defeat of the Hincks government" the same event as " Allan MacNab and Augustin-Norbert Morin formed a coalition government"? If so that could be made clearer through some rephrasing
Kind of? Governments were defeated by coalitions, not necessarily elections. I tried clarifying this in the article. Z1720 (talk) 18:37, 11 July 2021 (UTC)Reply
Some of Political philosophy seems more appropriate in the main text. His part in the moderate group could certainly be alluded to at the first introduction of his part in the Reform faction, and the explanation of Rolph's reasons for joining the rebellion deserve to go in the section describing that event. All but the Cooper and Hobhouse sections seem to be repeats and embellishments of previously established points in the text, and these points such as his leading of the Clear Grit party should be moved there, for example.
Removed the political philosophy section, and either deleted the information as WP:TRIVIA or moved it to the section that dealt with that issue. Z1720 (talk) 18:46, 11 July 2021 (UTC)Reply
Son-in-law of Mackenzie, mentioned as "Mackenzie's sons-in-law Charles Lindsey and John King"
References look good.
That's all I have for now, feel free to make comments or explain if I've misunderstood anything in my critique! Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 21:23, 9 July 2021 (UTC)Reply
Thanks for the review. I am busy in real life so it will take me a few days to address these concerns. If I do not respond in five days, please ping me. Z1720 (talk) 03:13, 10 July 2021 (UTC)Reply
I'm happy with all your corrections. I've made some minor edits of my own to wording and spelling errors which I hope you won't disagree with (I see you've changed the Tory wikilink before I managed to get my edit summary finished here - thank you!). A few queries remain:
Rochester needs a link and/or directions, I've no idea where it is!
Linked
Morrison is named as a 'fellow Reform leader' in the lead but not introduced as such in the main text
Added descriptor in the text. Z1720 (talk) 16:50, 12 July 2021 (UTC)Reply
'Monroe County' in Monroe County Medical Society needs linking
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... that John Rolph(pictured) was arrested for trying to solve Euclid's geometry problems? Source: Godfrey, Charles (1993). John Rolph: Rebel with Causes, page 18.
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– Per WP:TWODAB, the politician is the primary topic due to long term significance and pageviews. Sahaib (talk) 15:02, 9 August 2023 (UTC)Reply
Note: pages with content, such as John Rolph, are ineligible to be proposed titles in move requests unless they, too, are formally dispositioned. "John Rolph → Deleted to make way for page move" has been added to this request to meet that requirement. P.I. Ellsworth , ed.put'er there 16:47, 9 August 2023 (UTC)Reply
The graph you linked shows there were two spikes of interest in the politician, the largest and most recent in 2021, when they got 17k views in a single day when usually they get a handful. Other than that, the traffic is by and large comparable, so it's unclear how this proves primary topic by usage. Can you clarify the long-term significance argument? --Joy (talk) 18:48, 10 August 2023 (UTC)Reply
The 2021 spike was when this page was featured on the main page as part of WP:DYK. Z1720 (talk) 19:01, 10 August 2023 (UTC)Reply
Support per nom. Appears to be the primary topic, certainly in terms of long-term significance. -- Necrothesp (talk) 15:40, 16 August 2023 (UTC)Reply
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