Talk:Joey Daccord

GA Review

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Nominator: XR228 (talk · contribs)

Reviewer: HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk · contribs) 23:13, 24 March 2024 (UTC)

I will review this article. Please be advised that while I am the 9th among top editors of this article, I only made three edits and have not edited this article since May 6, 2022. As such, I believe I am still eligible to review this article. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 23:13, 24 March 2024 (UTC)

Go ahead. Thanks! XR228 (talk) 23:29, 24 March 2024 (UTC)

Rate	Attribute	Review Comment
1. Well-written:
	1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.
	1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.
2. Verifiable with no original research:
	2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.
	2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).
	2c. it contains no original research.
	2d. it contains no copyright violations or plagiarism.
3. Broad in its coverage:
	3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.
	3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).
	4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.
	5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
	6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content.
	6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.
	7. Overall assessment.

Review

• @XR228: I see this is your first Good Article nomination. I think this article needs some work but I am willing to put in the extra effort and work with you here to see this promotion happen. Please also note that these are suggestions and if you don't think they're right, just let me know and maybe we can compromise. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 00:51, 25 March 2024 (UTC)

  I see. I will follow your suggestions, and the article should be better by the end of the week. Thanks. XR228 (talk) 01:05, 25 March 2024 (UTC)

  I know it has only been less than a day, but I have, for the most part, followed your suggestions (I have far too much time on my hands). Here's what I did:

  • Formatted citations.
  • Added how Daccord helped North Andover achieve a 3–0 record in their first three games during the 2011–12 season (See here).
  • Added how Daccord set the franchise record with Muskegon, managing 1,344 saves in a season (See here).
  • Added when Daccord achieved his first collegiate shutout (See here).
  • Added more information on Daccord's rookie AHL and ECHL seasons (See here).
  • Added why Daccord was named Goaltender for the month of March (See here).
  • Added how Daccord helped the Checkers in the Calder Cup playoffs by achieving a series-clinching shutout (See here).

  If I missed anything, let me know. Thanks! XR228 (talk) 04:10, 25 March 2024 (UTC)

  @XR228: just a few things: you need a source for He would remain a healthy scratch for the remainder of the season, you need to Wikilink 2015 NHL Entry Draft, and Wikilink the first mention of the Ottawa Senators in the body of the article. According to the 2018–19 Ottawa Senators season Wiki article, their last game was April 6. This reference mentions how he was a healthy scratch on April 6. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 12:16, 25 March 2024 (UTC)

  Hello. Just finished that up right now. XR228 (talk) 14:06, 25 March 2024 (UTC)

  @XR228: I just ran the article through Earwig's copyvio detector [1], and it showed that this sentence: On March 14, Daccord was forced to start a game against the Toronto Maple Leafs after Matt Murray suffered an injury during warmups. He went on to make 33 saves in a 4–3 win for his first career NHL victory was largely copied from the source here. Please reword it so that it is in your own words. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 19:16, 25 March 2024 (UTC)

  Hello. I have reworded it. XR228 (talk) 22:53, 25 March 2024 (UTC)

  @XR228: Passing, well done! HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 01:22, 26 March 2024 (UTC)

  Thank you so much! XR228 (talk) 01:42, 26 March 2024 (UTC)

Playing career

• Overall, this article has a good foundation, especially in his professional career. It just needs some work in the early career section (junior and college). I think this article has a good chance of passing!
• The lead is a good summary of the article and is neutrally worded

Junior

• My overall impression of this section is that it's lacking in detail and flow. For example, you talk about his third and final season with Cushing which is 2014-15 but then mention how he was drafted in 2013. What happened between that time? Do we know where he played before and during his time at North Andover High School? I would prefer to have at least two sentences for each high school.
• According to his college bio, Daccord set a Muskegon franchise record for most saves in a single season but this is missing from the article.
  • I believe that adding these sentences falls under the "broad cover the topic without going into unnecessary detail." I am not asking for a year by year breakdown, but a bit more detail is required here.

• I have the same critique of the collegiate section. If he spent three years somewhere, please at least add a sentence for each of his seasons. Even if it's just something like his first NCAA shutout and what his stats were (which should be easily located in his college bio here).
  • According to his college bio: Daccord helped lead ASU to their first-ever win over a ranked opponent, recorded his first collegiate shutout vs. UMass-Lowell on Jan. 13, 2018, with 28 saves, and set program records for a Sun Devil goaltender in a season. These are all things that could be mentioned in the article.
  • I think Cale Morris would be an example to follow for the collegiate section since he is also a goaltender. I do not expect you to go into a similar amount of detail because I tend to go overboard, but his college bio gives a great outline of his collegiate accomplishments.

Professional

Overall, this section is well written and covers broadly his career professionally. I only have a few concerns about it:

• What happened after his first NHL game? Did the season end or was he a healthy scratch?
• It jumps from October 2020 to February 2021, I am assuming because of COVID. Please expand a little more about his play in his rookie season in the AHL. Like, what was his record at the time of the callup? When was his first win?
• He was named the AHL Goaltender of the Month in March 2022. Perhaps explain here why (ie. for posting a 6-1-0 record, a 1.55 GAA and a .956 save percentage)
• In May, Daccord helped the Checkers move to the third round of the 2022 Calder Cup playoffs. How did he help?

References

• Reference #1 needs an author (Wayne Scanlan)
• Reference #3 needs an author (Jay Oza)
• Reference #5 needs an author (Scott Barboza)
• Reference #6 is not properly formatted. Please remove mopferma@mlive.com and the long line after Opfermann
• Reference #8: the article publisher is not The Hockey News San Jose Sharks News, Analysis and More. It is just The Hockey News.
• Reference #19 needs an author (Bob Condor)
• Reference #21 is not properly formatted. Please remove - Charlotte Checkers Hockey - charlottecheckers.com". and add Nicholas Niedzielski as the author
• Reference #25 needs an author (Bob Condor)
• Reference #30 is not properly formated. The author of the article is not Press, TIM BOOTH Associated. Please fix and make Tim Booth lowercase
• Reference #32 needs an author (Craig Merz)
• Reference #34 is not properly formatted. Please remove JPote@northofboston.com

Other

• Please Wikilink save percentage
• Please cite his birthday somewhere in the body of the article as well as his birthplace. I typically make an "Early life" section where I list a player's birthday, birthplace, parents, and siblings. Sometimes it is just one sentence, but his birthday and birthplace need to be cited. Since you list his parents in "Personal life," I think you can just add his birthday there.