Talk:João Sousa/GA3
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Reviewer: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 13:15, 9 June 2016 (UTC)
Hi! I will be reviewing this in the next few days. Sainsf (talk · contribs) 13:15, 9 June 2016 (UTC)
This has improved considerably after the last two reviews. Here are my comments: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 15:28, 9 June 2016 (UTC)
- Lead
- Per the MOS the lead should be a summary of the major points of the article, and thus a subset of the main article. It seems it has some points that are absent in the main article.
- See that citations are kept only for potentially controversial points. All others are expected to be mentioned in the main article and sourced there itself.
- Early and personal life
- Mention when he was born
Done
- and Os Sandinenses until...after its closure. Source?
- Done
- He speaks fluently Portuguese... I think "He is fluent in..." sounds better
- Done, I agree
- Pre-2008
- I think some consistency is needed in which locations are wikilinked and which not.
- Done, all locations are now wikilinked
- where he also reached his first singles final You mean "junior" singles final? Because he already has a title to his name by now.
- Done, I agree that the way it is might me misleading
- 2008–2012
- winning both singles dead rubbers he took part in over Philippos Tsangaridis from Cyprus I think there should be an emdash before "over"
- Done
- his last to date Better say something like "last as of 2016", we should be sure this remains updated
- Done
- becoming the fourth Portuguese player It was he and not his ranking that "became" this.
- Done
- 2013
- Despite being knocked out of both tournaments in the first round I think there is some overciting here, only two refs are used in similar cases elsewhere
- world number three Say "3" as you do elsewhere after "world number".
- former top 10 Jürgen Melzer former top 10 "ranker"?
- Say "World number" or "World no." And at some places you say "the then-world number" (which is understood, and need not be mentioned). There should be consistency in this.
- 2016
- He will next play at the Open Sud de France I think this was last edited in January 2016. Any updates since then?
- Playing style
- as a tough opponent who never backs down from a fight Perhaps use some quote marks
- There don't seem to be any wikilinks here, you may try linking some tennis terms
- Equipment and endorsements
- He criticized local government "the" local
- lack of support of sports other than football "to" sports
- Sources
It seems some claims were found not to be in the cited source in the previous review, so I will check them as far as I can and advise you to do so as well.
- Is every point of the infobox sourced here or somewhere else?
- Sources for each table in "Career statistics" should be explicitly mentioned, probably in a line preceding the table.
@SOAD KoRn: Please respond. Sainsf (talk · contribs) 08:05, 14 June 2016 (UTC)
- Dear Sainsf, I apologize for not having come here sooner. Thank you for taking the time to review the article. Even today I will start attending to each one of your comments. Regards. SOAD KoRn (talk) 10:12, 14 June 2016 (UTC)
@SOAD KoRn: Please respond. Sainsf (talk · contribs) 13:19, 21 June 2016 (UTC)
- I am right now working on it. Once again, I thank you for the patience. Regards. SOAD KoRn (talk) 22:23, 22 June 2016 (UTC)
@SOAD KoRn: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 13:23, 26 June 2016 (UTC)
No response from the nominator since a week. Sorry but I will have to fail this. Sainsf (talk · contribs) 00:45, 30 June 2016 (UTC)