Talk:Indian locomotive class WDG-4G/GA1

Latest comment: 3 years ago by Field Marshal Aryan in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: ArnabSaha (talk · contribs) ❯❯❯ S A H A 15:19, 8 July 2020 (UTC) GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteriaReply

  1. Is it well written?
    A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:  
    B. It complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation:  
  2. Is it verifiable with no original research?
    A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:  
    B. All in-line citations are from reliable sources, including those for direct quotations, statistics, published opinion, counter-intuitive or controversial statements that are challenged or likely to be challenged, and contentious material relating to living persons—science-based articles should follow the scientific citation guidelines:  
    C. It contains no original research:  
    D. It contains no copyright violations nor plagiarism:  
  3. Is it broad in its coverage?
    A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:  
    B. It stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style):  
  4. Is it neutral?
    It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:  
  5. Is it stable?
    It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:  
  6. Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?
    A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:  
    B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:  
  7. Overall:
    Pass or Fail:   PASS. (2nd opinion by Lee Vilenski)


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  • The lead needs expansion. At least 2 paras. In the 2nd para add about its specification, fleet etc.
  • There are few issues with grammar and punctuation. Example- "GE has said that, during operations, real time real-time tracking will be undertaken for the locomotives with an aim to to increase productivity and minimize time duration." and "After winning the contract, General Electric started designing the locomotives which was were done by the Indian branch of GE Global Research in Bangalore."
"started designing... which were done"?? Really?! BTW, I am wondering - by any chance, was this change suggested by an automated grammar tool (just to be sure NOT to rely on this tool for grammar)? Also, I am not sure at all that "with an aim to" goes against "spelling and grammar are correct" (it looks more as a style issuechoice). Ipsign (talk) 09:25, 9 July 2020 (UTC)Reply
Ipsign, this is my first review and I am learning. so, pardon me if I have made any mistake. I check manually and also use tools to check spelling mistakes and all. ❯❯❯ S A H A 13:45, 9 July 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • Citations in the infobox and its info doesn't appear in the main prose. Add them under specifications.
  • Sentences like "They will be used extensively for freight hauling and will replace the existing fleet of the ageing ALCo locomotives which have been the workhorse of IR for decades." in the lead seems pretty informal.
  • The section "Locomotive shed" is not upto the mark of GA. It can be changed to "Fleet" and a prose can be added instead of the table.
I will do that, but when Suvadeep Saha56 comes after me, you have to be there. Field Marshal Aryan (talk) 10:19, 9 July 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • Omit duplicate links like the 5th and 7th citation.

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ArnabSaha, check it now. I have implemented the changes you wanted. Let me know if any more is needed. Regards, Field Marshal Aryan (talk) 12:14, 9 July 2020 (UTC)Reply

Field Marshal Aryan, still there are some issues. abbreviations like UIC-1. citations aren't properly formatted. example- 14th citation. ❯❯❯ S A H A 14:01, 9 July 2020 (UTC)Reply
ArnabSaha, Thanks for the suggestion. I will manually re-add all the citations.
PS. You might want to use   instead of space in your signature. (check in source mode if not visible) Field Marshal Aryan (talk) 05:36, 10 July 2020 (UTC)Reply
ArnabSaha, I have updated the references. Please check it. Field Marshal Aryan (talk) 12:18, 10 July 2020 (UTC)Reply