Talk:Ichigo Kurosaki/Archive 2

Abilities

This is the first time I've made a new section, and I don't have an account, so I hope someone doesn't just delete this. I don't think it makes sense that Ichigo has no abilities section. He only has the creation and concepts and appearances, while others, such as Yasutora (Chad) have sections about the plot outline for him, appearance, and abilities. Doesn't it seem that Ichigo should have an ability section? Other major soul reapers have sections that explain their zanpakuto, it's shikai, it's ablities, and it's bankai. We know Ichigo's shikai, bankai, special ability, and even his Hollow Self. Shouldn't these things have something better than a small mention in his Appearance section? —Preceding unsigned comment added by 68.4.125.116 (talk) 22:28, 26 February 2010 (UTC)

See Wikipedia:Manual of Style (anime- and manga-related articles)#Layout for a characters article; "for personality and other aspects that require reader/viewer interpretation, reviewer/critical/academic comments are strongly desired."Tintor2 (talk) 01:38, 27 February 2010 (UTC)

Arrancar Zangetsu?

Shouldn't the article, where it talks about Zangetsu's appearance, mention his "Tensa" form and that he can merge with the inner Hollow to become an arrancar-like being? At one point I saw that it did mention Zangetsu's Tensa form, but it was reverted. 75.157.120.15 (talk) 19:31, 9 July 2010 (UTC)

Ichi's Forms

The latest (and apparently last) chapter has an opening picture of all of Ichigo's forms: human, sealed Zanpakuto, shikai Zanpakuto, bankai Zanpakuto, Visored, and Hollow 2.0; running together, with the foot of his next metamorphosis vanishing off the edge of the page. I suggest we include this image to show how the character has changed and developed over the course of the series. 173.180.64.146 (talk) 09:26, 25 August 2010 (UTC)

Ichi's New Hollow Form

Shouldn't something be mentioned about Ichigo's new Hollow form? You know, the one he assumes after Ulquiorra Schiffer blows a hole in his chest with his Cero Oscuro. The mask is very different from Ichigo's normal Hollow mask, and its body shape is different than the one he took transforming into a complete Hollow while training with the Vizard (horns, no tail, no shoulder spikes). —Preceding unsigned comment added by 75.157.84.228 (talk) 01:40, 30 March 2009 (UTC)

oh this was not put by this person but in my personal opinion and that of my friend this is not per say a new "hollow form' but ichigo's "ARRANCAR form" —Preceding unsigned comment added by 75.106.242.146 (talk) 03:56, 14 May 2009 (UTC)

That's WP:OR and we should refrain from putting it. DaisukeVulgar (talk) 09:41, 14 May 2009 (UTC)

Actually it shouldn't be included at all til a legit english translation of that manga or episode exists...which won't be for a while!--Licourtrix (talk) 16:53, 21 June 2009 (UTC)

Besides, Arrancar have broken masks. The mask Ichigo wore when he killed Ulquiorra was whole, not broken. 142.26.194.190 (talk) 14:48, 2 October 2009 (UTC)

His mask changed again. 142.26.194.190 (talk) 14:53, 16 October 2009 (UTC)

this sould be known as ichigos espada form —Preceding unsigned comment added by 208.191.180.11 (talk) 18:08, 10 June 2010 (UTC)

The espada are the top ten Arrancar in Aizen's service. Arrancar, as stated above, have broken masks. Ergo, it is not "ichigos espada form". It has been confirmed that that form was Ichigo's new Hollow form. Leave it at that. 207.216.208.68 (talk) 21:16, 11 September 2010 (UTC)

Mugetsu

Ichigo is no longer a Soul Reaper. While it hasn't been confirmed that Aizen is dead, it has been confirmed that in using the Final Getsuga Tensho, or "Mugetsu", Ichigo has lost his Soul Reaper powers. Though he could always use the Hogyoku to ractivate them, as happened to his father, that is up to Tite Kubo to Deicide. We should add that he has sacrificed his abilities to destroy Aizen. 207.216.208.68 (talk) 02:30, 16 September 2010 (UTC)

Fullbringer

Who added "Fullbuster" under the species category? Fullbring (NOT Fullbust) is a type of power, not a species. I am going to remove it. 173.180.89.129 (talk) 01:58, 18 February 2011 (UTC)

GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:Ichigo Kurosaki/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Petergriffin9901 (talk · contribs) 03:42, 3 May 2014 (UTC)

• Lead

Ichigo's character was created to replace Rukia as the lead character from the series as Kubo noted that Rukia was unsuitable to be the protagonist -> I'm a bit confused. He decided this after starting the anime and her recieving negative feedback, or while writing the series he changed courses? I'd like a bit of elaboration here.

[5]Ichigo's

among both fans and reviewers, and people all over the world -> I think you can do better than "people all over the world"

Ichigo is also featured -> is often featured

popularity, popular

also remarked favorably -> commented

likeness has also been released -> has been released

• Creation

I see you elaborate more here. That's great. A little tweaking still on its wording in the lead would be appropriate

character, character

creating, created

several types attributes -> ?

of the character that were never added to the story -> not very clear

Along with Orihime Inoue, Ichigo has the hardest face to draw for Kubo -> According to Kubo

When making illustrations featuring Ichigo, he found one weird as it featured him with a cheerful smile. -> A bit awkwardly worded. Maybe "While illustrating one of Ichigo's scenes, Kubo found it difficult...

greatest strength to be that he is considerate and thoughtful -> Considerate and thoughtful nature

about him they discover that -> will

underneath he is warm and kind hearted, which attracts them -> The girls? Needs some fixing

He emphasized how every action Ichigo -> with every action, Ichigo

as well as how he feels attached to the character. -> confusing

Arrancar arc ended -> some sort of link would be nice

Kubo tried rebooting the series which resulted -> makes it sound as if he failed?

and Mona Marshall as a kid -> adolescent

as a result of the character's thoughts before his actions -> awkwardly written, difficult to understand

Bosch has liked Ichigo's character -> has enjoyed voicing Ichigo's

The last line and a half need some tidying up

• • As a fan of the series, it's definitely an interesting and clean read. I'll continue with the rest in due time. Nice work.--CallMeNathan • Talk2Me 10:13, 7 May 2014 (UTC)

Thank you for your time! :) I'll give my best to solve all issues. Cheers! (Nightwolf87 (talk) 15:52, 9 May 2014 (UTC))

• Appearances

who later was killed by Ichigo -> the sentence starts off fine and derails by this point

Karakura High School, Town, Hollow, Soul Reaper - it all needs to be linked; especially on first mention

One day, Ichigo's family is attacked by a Hollow, and Soul Reaper named Rukia Kuchiki gives her powers to him so he can save his family -> This whole sentence and the introduction of Rukia needs work

For a few months, Ichigo acts as a Soul Reaper in protecting Karakura Town from Hollows -> acts in Rukia's place as the """"

I think Soul Society should be prefaced by the. Just as the government

Byakuya Kuchiki and Renji Abarai from Soul Society -> a better introduction would be nice. Maybe describe them ass officers or something. If a reader has never watched the show, they'll have to search link every character thus far. Best tp give some sort of introduction to the plot.

Ichigo loses his powers in the process and trains with Kisuke Urahara to regain them. During his training, Ichigo learns -> Needs work. As a result of losing his battle to Kuchiki, he begins training with etc.

but also indirectly gains Hollow powers then heads off to Soul Society -> total jumpy, poor prose

Use better synonyms and prose than "fights someone"

Ichigo defeats Ikkaku and learns that. Following Ikkaku's defeat, Ichigo learns..

intends to fight him. -> could do way better

Along the way, Ichigo and Ganju take Hanatarō Yamada hostage and he shows them the way to Rukia. Ichigo fights Renji for a second time and defeats him in order to continue on.[24] After the fight, Ichigo is healed by Hanatarō and then encounters Kenpachi Zaraki. Ichigo struggles to cut the captain at first but then Zangetsu helps him find his resolve and defeat Kenpachi -> whole thing needs work

tends to Ichigo’s injuries then Ichigo goes

Ichigo fights Byakuya with temporary help from his inner Hollow, resulting in a tie and the realization of Byakuya that what Ichigo had been truly fighting is laws of Soul Society instead of him. -> confusing, run on. Needs work

the SS

and then is easily defeated by the former captain. -> and is not to be used to joint sentences or different points

Eventually, with the Hōgyoku, Aizen employs -> Using the power of the "", Aizen

an army of Arrancars with his Espadas attacking Ichigo -> run-on, poor prose

with the aid of the Visards that were members of the Soul Society until Aizen's actions forced them to live among humans. -> Visards; past members of "" before Aizen's etc.

Hollow, Hollow

Similar issues persist. Please follow this guide and perfect the rest of the article. The writing continues to be poor throughout. Also, the reception section seems to use broken and loosely adapted quotes and put into poor prose.--CallMeNathan • Talk2Me 02:19, 10 May 2014 (UTC)

Hi there! :) Most issues have been solved although I think it still needs tweaking, especially in Appearance section. I removed and revamp a few minor sentence to obtain clear picture of the story. I tried to focus only on important parts from neutral point of view. Some links are updated and I added a new ones. Lead and creation sections are also revamped. Reception section is revamped but I saw in other GA fiction characters that part of the reviewers statement could be used and placed in quotation marks. Cheers! (Nightwolf87 (talk) 21:31, 19 May 2014 (UTC))

Okay mate. I made another minor copy edit and am now left to congratulate you on the article. I'm passing it. Nice job :)--PeterGriffin • Talk2Me 09:52, 22 May 2014 (UTC)

Thank you so much mate! Thank you for your time and effort to help me to bring this article to GA status. I hope we can cooperate in the future. Thanks once again and cheers! :) (Nightwolf87 (talk) 15:38, 22 May 2014 (UTC))

"Ichigo fights Byakuya with temporary help from his inner Hollow, resulting in a tie and the realization of Byakuya that what Ichigo had been truly fighting is laws of Soul Society instead of him. -> confusing, run on. Needs work"
No confusion I think. If you go back to that episode, it's clearly a tie that Byakuya is standing still when having conversation with fallen Ichigo who uses up all his energy. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 58.176.234.103 (talk) 02:49, 24 October 2014 (UTC)