Talk:Hus' House (Vršovice)

Latest comment: 10 years ago by Amandajm in topic Improving the article

Improving the article edit

To make this read better, the authors need to put the events of the history and description in a better order.

  1. foundation, architect, builder etc
  2. plan and purpose. Don't start describing all the present and past uses, but write a sentence that makes it clear it was a multi-purpose building
  3. describe the building, first the basic form (it's not a traditional church), its material, and its tower
  4. describe the tower from bottom to top. Those are "louvres" not shutters. Does it mean there are bells or a carillon or a sound system? Then the lighthouse, then the goblet then the cross.
  5. interior. State that/whether the building has a chapel or meeting room for the congregation. If so, this must be the most significant space in the building. Or is it the same space that is used as a theatre or auditorium. At present you only mention a theatre. Are there two such spaces (church and theatre) or only a single dual-purpose auditorium?
  6. past uses and present uses, in that order. The fact that the namesake of the theatre is dead is not something for which you write "even though" he is dead. It is natural for a theatre (or anything else) to be named after a recently-deceased notable person. Think about th word. This is only a short article, so you can afford to give thought to the expression of every part.

Amandajm (talk) 09:35, 23 November 2013 (UTC)Reply

Do feel free to make these changes, I'm sure your suggested structure is an improvement. Victuallers (talk) 10:27, 23 November 2013 (UTC)Reply
Thank you!
I would much rather that you did it. I'm trying to get another article together, and getting lots of distractions! Amandajm (talk) 02:19, 25 November 2013 (UTC)Reply