Talk:Homerun (film)/GA Review

Latest comment: 16 years ago by Hildanknight in topic GA Review

GA Review edit

GA review (see here for criteria)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose):   b (MoS):  
    Article does not appear to follow the Film MOS. Sections are out of order, with no compelling reason shown for why this is show. Plot should be before production and cast should use bullet lists not tables. The Political commentary seems worthy of noting, but can it renamed, or incorporated into reception? - Fixed
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):  
    Can any better sources be found for where IMDB is used as a source? - Fixed
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
    Missing section on distribution; no DVD or VHS release in any country? - Fixed
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
    Why two non-free images in the plot? Neither seems particularly necessary for illustrating what is depicted. - Fixed
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:  
    On hold pending responses and corrections per notes above All issues have now been addressed and article has been passed. Congrats.

AnmaFinotera (talk) 02:49, 3 April 2008 (UTC)Reply

Discussion edit

Thanks for taking the time to review this article. Here are my responses to your concerns:

  • Article does not follow Film MOS: The GA criteria only requires compliance to six parts of the MOnSter (as I call the MoS), in contrast to the FA criteria, which demand adherence to the entire MOnSter, including the style guidelines of relevant WikiProjects. I Not Stupid was reviewed and passed by The Rambling Man, an experienced GA reviewer, despite not following the Film MOnSter. I placed the Production section first because I was concerned that the infobox would push the screenshots down. However, after clicking "edit this page", moving the Plot section forward and previewing, I realised that this is not the case. Thus, if you insist, I can move the Plot section forward. Converting the Cast section to a bulleted list does not make sense. Any information which I add to a bulleted list in the Cast section, beyond what is already there, would probably be original research; referenced information on Singaporean movies is scarce.
  • Use of IMDB as a source: I could not find a more reliable reference for information about the production crew. Since the information is uncontroversial, I think citing IMDB is fine. If not, would it be fine to leave that sentence unreferenced? IMDB is also used as a reference for information about Homerun's box office performance, but that information is cited to two other sources as well, so I can remove that reference to IMDB if you wish.
    • Yes I have to agree that citing IMDB for the crew should be fine. Chensiyuan (talk) 15:06, 5 April 2008 (UTC)Reply
  • Lack of Distribution section: As mentioned above, referenced information on Singaporean movies is scarce. I could not find any information on distribution or a DVD release beyond what is already mentioned in the Production section. (Of course, a VCD/DVD release did occur in Singapore; I own a Homerun VCD!)
  • Non-free images in Plot: Both screenshots show recurring themes in the plot. In the movie, Kiat Kun and Beng Soon (and their friends) often get into arguments and conflicts, hence the inclusion of the first screenshot. These arguments are part of the political satire in Homerun; Kiat Kun's friends represent Singapore while Beng Soon's friends represent Malaysia. Running is another recurring theme in Homerun; in fact, reference 7 mentions a member of the cast commenting that shooting so many running scenes was very tiring! My Wikifriends know that I dislike the anti-fair use brigade. Though, if you insist, I can remove the images.

If I sound too argumentative or belligerent, I apologise. Since Homerun (film) will be my second GA if passed, while you appear to be an inexperienced GA reviewer, this review is a learning process for both of us.

--J.L.W.S. The Special One (talk) 13:53, 5 April 2008 (UTC)Reply

I just wanted to weigh in with a couple of thoughts. IMDb has been questionable in the past because it has user-submitted information that may not always be correct. However, I've thought IMDb was acceptable for cast and crew information of released contemporary films. (I've heard of inaccuracies about this information for older films, though.) Can I assume that the cast and crew information for which you cite IMDb is available in the film's credits? Maybe as a different approach, you could write a kind of <ref>Listed in the film's credits</ref> tag instead of using IMDb.
Secondly, non-free images have been tricky to use in film articles on Wikipedia. Traditionally, there has not been much issue with non-free images in Featured and Good film Articles. However, these days, editors are looking for a more explicit purpose for non-free images to be included. What you argue for the inclusion of the screen shots can easily be disputed by another editor. Anyone could present their own take on themes and choose from a wide selection of potential screen shots for the film. With the Plot section, it is difficult to tie non-free images into that. The Plot section is a primary source, and it's questionable to act as a secondary source of sorts and personally decide what images fit there. I've usually discouraged images in the Plot section for this reason, though it's possible to include one using secondary sources; see Dirty Dancing. One of my own works, Fight Club, uses a variety of non-free images outside the Plot section, and the images are explicitly tied to the content in the article body. In looking at Homerun, I think that a non-free image could exist to support this sentence: "The final scene in the movie shows the Chew siblings standing before a long muddy path, which symbolises the uncertainly faced by both the newly independent nation in 1965 and the country in transition in 2003." What do you think? —Erik (talkcontrib) - 16:04, 5 April 2008 (UTC)Reply
I think that Haemo's edit shows that IMDb can make mistakes. My interest was piqued about this correction, and The New York Times matches Haemo's corrected information. I think this clear reflects the weakness in citing IMDb. —Erik (talkcontrib) - 22:00, 5 April 2008 (UTC)Reply
Is Yahoo! Movies a more reliable source than IMDB? If so, I shall consult it instead of IMDB when I write my next film GA. In this case, the New York Times could be used as a source. Thanks, Haemo, for finding a more reliable and accurate source! --J.L.W.S. The Special One (talk) 03:18, 6 April 2008 (UTC)Reply
I think the re-organization issues are minor, so I went ahead and did them, since they don't affect the article at all. I also fixed the IMDb references, since one wasn't needed and the other could be more reliably sourced. I've got a better suggestion for the images — why not use the image here in the "controversy" section, since it's one of the parts of the film which is very controversial. --Haemo (talk) 22:13, 5 April 2008 (UTC)Reply
That certainly is one of the most controversial scenes in Homerun! Unfortunately, the image is of a very low quality and contains subtitles. --J.L.W.S. The Special One (talk) 03:18, 6 April 2008 (UTC)Reply
Regarding the use of IMDB to source credits, this discussion may be of interest Wikipedia:Reliable sources/Noticeboard#Film Credit Guidelines. I'm sorry if you felt I was being too particular in my review. I was not nearly as particular as I am with FACs. :P I feel GA shouldn't just be automatically given, but that reviewers should honor the article and its editor(s) by truly giving it a good thorough review. Some of my remarks were questions for clarity and to ensure information wasn't being left out. And yes, I've only recently started doing GA reviews, as I've generally aimed straight for FA/FL instead. I started doing some GA reviews for two reasons: One, I have my first article up for GA which I submitted as I know it will be awhile before I can take it to FA but that I do feel is ready for GA, so I felt I should pay it forward and hope that whoever reviews that article is also thorough so I can feel confident it earned it GA mark. And, two, because I am dismayed by the number of truly bad articles that have been casually passed through GA of late. As such, I felt I should do my part to help by being a thorough reviewer in the areas I normally work in. I was an active member in the film project before turning more towards anime and manga, so I felt I was familiar enough with the topic to be a decent adequate reviewer of this article.
I feel this is an excellent article and just wanted to clarify and have a few issues addressed before I felt I could personally say I felt it was GA quality. I was a little dismayed and disheartened by the reaction to what I felt was a fairly easy going review and my putting it on hold, particular the remarks left elsewhere. On hold isn't bad, to me, it just means "here are some relatively minor issues that I felt can be fixed relatively quickly." With those addressed, I fully intended to pass the article. AnmaFinotera (talk) 22:30, 5 April 2008 (UTC)Reply
I added a stubby, but sourced, distro section to the article — maybe we could merge it with the "reception" or "production" parts? --Haemo (talk) 22:57, 5 April 2008 (UTC)Reply
Heck, it's better as part of the "Production and distribution" sections anyways. --Haemo (talk) 23:00, 5 April 2008 (UTC)Reply
How did you find enough information to write a paragraph about distribution, when the hours I have spent on research turned up nothing? --J.L.W.S. The Special One (talk) 03:18, 6 April 2008 (UTC)Reply
I wondering, is the Cast section necessary? I've thought that Cast sections were most appropriate if there was a lot to say about various roles, or if there were a lot of important roles in the film (like in an ensemble film). The article's Plot section already mentions everyone, so the Cast section seems a little redundant. Thoughts? —Erik (talkcontrib) - 23:04, 5 April 2008 (UTC)Reply
Cast sections even if fairly small will be identified easily in the contents section rather than the more intricate way of finding cast/characters and actors in the plot or infobox sections. As to other points made, the IMDb articles generally appear to be accurate in most aspects except for the trivia sections which are iffy. Images are a bit of a conundrum – put them with the content text or directly in a gallery section? Normally, images that fit well with the body of the article seem to be the best way to go. As to referencing, I still find there are some inconsistencies in the notes/end notes section and the reliance only on electronic data can still be problematic. FWIW Bzuk (talk) 23:51, 5 April 2008 (UTC).Reply
Well, tracking down sources for movies like Homerun is quite difficult, so online sources are very useful since they can be more readily sourced. Notice, however, the wide variety of newspaper cites here. --Haemo (talk) 23:58, 5 April 2008 (UTC)Reply
WRT to the cast issue, I think it's acceptable as it stands — not the biggest, and could be trimmed, but I like the separation from the plot. --Haemo (talk) 23:59, 5 April 2008 (UTC)Reply
Fine by me. I was more concerned with the balance of the content; the other sections are substantial, whereas the Cast section seemed awfully minimal. How about a different approach -- having a simple list instead, in which each character's role can be identified? —Erik (talkcontrib) - 00:11, 6 April 2008 (UTC)Reply
That could work, but I would be concerned with the overlap with the plot section. --Haemo (talk) 01:10, 6 April 2008 (UTC)Reply
Isn't there already an overlap with the Cast section existing at all? ;) I was suggesting nothing more than ten or fifteen words to describe each character. I guess to "flesh out" the Cast section a little more. —Erik (talkcontrib) - 02:31, 6 April 2008 (UTC)Reply
Indeed, as mentioned above, referenced information on Singaporean movies is scarce. (Note that 17 of the 32 references - just over half - are newspaper references.) Thus I was concerned that changing the Cast section to an annotated bulleted list would entail the introduction of original research. Please point out any "inconsistencies in the notes/end notes section" so they can be addressed. As for the images, perhaps their importance (as I outlined above) could be made more explicit in the article and in their fair-use rationales. --J.L.W.S. The Special One (talk) 03:18, 6 April 2008 (UTC)Reply
I think that a simple bulleted list has been preferable on film articles because there is no need to worry for coding, and detail can be added and copy-edited. I understand how you see that this seems to leave it open-ended for original research, but I think OR is a concern anywhere. Such OR could be easily reverted with explanations to the respective editors. It's a little flexibility at a small price of maintaining it, in my opinion. —Erik (talkcontrib) - 14:05, 6 April 2008 (UTC)Reply
An annotated bulleted list would contain original research; a simple bulleted list would not. --J.L.W.S. The Special One (talk) 13:04, 7 April 2008 (UTC)Reply

I was asked to comment here, and so I will do so. It seems the outstanding issues are that of the cast section, and the images. For the cast section, it probably isn't a huge deal either way, but I would change it to a bulleted list to keep consistent with other articles. A short description of the character could be cited back to the film, as with the plot. As for the images, I would probably keep the image with the award. I don't think the film screenshots are necessary, especially if there is an external link pointing to a page containing such screenshots. dihydrogen monoxide (H2O) 02:07, 6 April 2008 (UTC)Reply

I think removing the cast section is better, upon reflection. MOS:FILM indicates that citing the actor in-line in the plot section is a valid alternative, and describing the characters over again seems redundant and un-necessary to me. Personally, I think including the image of the race is pretty important — it highlights a lot of important aspects and motifs in the film which are difficult to convey in text. For instance, the film has been adapted to a kampung setting, and a lot of the film deals with the poverty of the subjects. Also, running is a repeated metaphor that Neo uses — it both advances the plot, and ties into the political metaphor used throughout the film. It seems really important to me, at least, to convey some of these in images — personally, I was really struck by how the characters looked, and how that really highlighted their poverty, and how that related to Singapore. These are the sorts of things which don't come across well in writing, without doing a lot of editorializing. --Haemo (talk) 20:33, 6 April 2008 (UTC)Reply
Haemo, remember the fair-use rationales you wrote for the two screenshots in I Not Stupid. They mentioned that the scenes illustrated major themes in I Not Stupid, which were critical to analysis and reception of the movie. Perhaps you could write similar fair-use rationales for the two screenshots in Homerun (film)? The fact that the screenshots show recurring themes in the plot should be made more explicit, both in the article and in the fair-use rationales.
Should the Cast section be removed? I am rather "on the fence". The Cast section makes it easier for readers to find the information and for me to reference it. However, removing the redundant section would reduce the article size by 0.5 kB and the Film MOnSter says doing so is fine.
Note that I would like to retain consistency across all the GAs about Singaporean movies that I write. Therefore, if we make drastic decisions such as removing of the Cast section (or removing the screenshots), I will have to edit I Not Stupid accordingly, and will have to bear the decision in mind when writing I Not Stupid Too and other GAs about Singaporean films in future. This should not be a reason to oppose such drastic decisions if they benefit all the GAs on Singaporean movies that I write.
--J.L.W.S. The Special One (talk) 13:04, 7 April 2008 (UTC)Reply
I'm personally fine with the cast section being kept, though I do think it should be a bulleted list as described by the MOS. It does not have to have any OR at all, as it should contain simply a short 1-2 sentence summary of things specifically stated in the film or other sources about the character. AnmaFinotera (talk) 13:56, 7 April 2008 (UTC)Reply

AnmaFinotera, please do not be "dismayed and disheartened" by the reaction to your review. This review is a learning experience for both of us. Looks like both of us are on the right track and you will walk away as a better GA reviewer, while I will become a better GA writer. When the nominator and reviewer disagree, it never hurts to have input from others. Such input helps the learning process and helps check that both the nominator and reviewer have done a good job.

--J.L.W.S. The Special One (talk) 03:18, 6 April 2008 (UTC)Reply

What should we do with the Cast section? edit

Once Haemo edits the fair-use rationales so they mention the screenshots' significance as showing recurring themes in the plot, the only remaining issue will be the Cast section. Some have proposed converting it to a bulleted list or removing it altogether, while others think it should remain as a table. Since I wish to retain consistency across all the GAs on Singaporean movies that I write, I think we should have further discussion to determine consensus on this issue. Please !vote Table, Bulleted list or Remove below, explaining your !vote. Could the hold period be extended to allow for this discussion (and give Haemo time to edit the fair-use rationales)?

--J.L.W.S. The Special One (talk) 15:37, 11 April 2008 (UTC)Reply

Sure, as long as its actively being worked on, I'm fine with keeping it on hold. :) One note, though, the screenshot significance also needs to be in the article itself, not just the FUR, otherwise no one knows its significance unless they look at the image itself. It needs to be clear in the article as well. AnmaFinotera (talk) 15:43, 11 April 2008 (UTC)Reply
The Plot section mentions that "the boys quarrel" and "try to resolve their differences, [but] eventually give up on reaching an agreement". In addition, the Political commentary section says that "The water dispute is portrayed by Kiat Kun (Singapore) quarrelling with Beng Soon (Malaysia) over the right to draw water from the kampung well". Perhaps the Plot section should inform readers that the boys quarrel regularly, instead of merely giving an example of such quarrels, while the Political satire section should include a statement that Kiat Kun's friends represent Singapore and Beng Soon's friends represent Malaysia in all their arguments, not just the incident at the well. As for the second screenshot, one can easily infer that it is significant because it shows the climax of the film, as described in the last paragraph. To make it clearer that the screenshot also shows a recurring theme in Homerun, namely running and the use of running as a metaphor, should the second paragraph of the Plot section also have a sentence stating that the siblings had to run to and from school every day? --J.L.W.S. The Special One (talk) 09:04, 15 April 2008 (UTC)Reply
Honestly, the first picture doesn't look like boys arguing, it looks like two friends talking. I just checked the full and realized that's it. That image is way too small to meet the image requirements. Is a larger, more clearly viewable image available? The captions should indicate the image significance, with sources if necessary, rather than just saying what scene it is. For the second image, if running is the use a metaphor, give a source for that and update the second image's caption to say something along that line. AnmaFinotera (talk) 15:42, 15 April 2008 (UTC)Reply
Just change it to a bullet list for now; the other things can be done later, and aren't needed for this review. Also, I'll be finishing the rationales today. --Haemo (talk) 18:56, 13 April 2008 (UTC)Reply
I would rather not make a hasty decision on something that will affect all my GAs about Singaporean movies. Of course, if AnmaFinotera decides that the Cast section being a table should not be a reason to deny this article GA status, this point is moot and the discussion can close. --J.L.W.S. The Special One (talk) 09:04, 15 April 2008 (UTC)Reply
Just seeing where things are on the images, particularly with relation to my last comment above? While I agreed to extended the GA hold, its been another week since then and it can't stay on hold permanently.AnmaFinotera (talk) 18:06, 18 April 2008 (UTC)Reply
The one which you object to as "just two friends talking" is already specifically discussed in the criticism section as part of the significant political overtones the film has. The other one is specifically mentioned as a parallel to Singapore's predicament in which "both children are pushed to the limit". They're not only important to the plot, but are mentioned as parallels in reviews and criticism. I've fixed the captions to reflect your concerns. --Haemo (talk) 21:37, 18 April 2008 (UTC)Reply
What about the image size though? It is too small to meet image guidelines in that it is not very clear. Also, why not move the images to the section where they are specifically discussed? AnmaFinotera (talk) 23:03, 18 April 2008 (UTC)Reply
I think that the image guidelines recommend that fair-use images should be small and of a low resolution to prevent inappropriate reuse (such as piracy). --J.L.W.S. The Special One (talk) 05:29, 19 April 2008 (UTC)Reply
Not that small. :P To meet the guidelines it should be 300 pixels on the shortest measurement (length or width). The image guidelines also say they must be large enough to be clearly identifiable. With the image so small, the facial expressions are lost, hence my saying it doesn't look like what the caption says. Is a larger one available? AnmaFinotera (talk) 05:44, 19 April 2008 (UTC)Reply
The second screenshot has a length of 300 pixels and thus meets the requirements. However, the first screenshot does not; its length is 158 pixels. Perhaps I could get a copy of the first screenshot by watching Homerun on Crunchyroll and ALT+PRINT SCREENing during that scene; that screenshot would definitely be large enough. --J.L.W.S. The Special One (talk) 11:55, 21 April 2008 (UTC)Reply
Actually the second only barely meets. The shortest side should be 300, but its not as bad. If you are going to retake one though, it wouldn't hurt to retake both and resize so that the shortest sides, rather than the longest, are 300. Once the first one is replaced, though, let me know and I'll close the GA. AnmaFinotera (talk) 14:42, 21 April 2008 (UTC)Reply
I will see what I can do. Give me a couple of days. Life in a Singaporean junior college is insanely hectic! --J.L.W.S. The Special One (talk) 14:49, 21 April 2008 (UTC)Reply
What should replace the first screenshot? Take your pick from screenshot of an argument after a deal is reneged on or screenshot of an argument over water. I could not ALT+PRINT SCREEN an exact copy of the first screenshot because that scene had subtitles throughout the argument. By the way, do I simply upload the new screenshot under the same filename (my understanding of image policy is as little as your understanding of Singlish)? --J.L.W.S. The Special One (talk) 03:32, 26 April 2008 (UTC)Reply
Yes, you can just upload the new one under the same filename, since the filename isn't particularly unique. :P Just make sure to update the description, as needed. For which to use, I'm inclined to say the first as it matches the current caption more. Its a shame you don't have access to the DVD though. :( AnmaFinotera (talk) 03:40, 26 April 2008 (UTC)Reply
I uploaded the former screenshot under the same filename, then updated the caption, altering the size and position of the image in the process. Are we done? --J.L.W.S. The Special One (talk) 08:08, 26 April 2008 (UTC)Reply

Straw poll about Cast section edit

  • Simple bulleted list with no annotations (any and all annotations should be removed as original research). The syntax of a bulleted list is less complicated than that of a table and changing the table to a simple bulleted list will make the article comply with the Film MOnSter. --J.L.W.S. The Special One (talk) 05:29, 19 April 2008 (UTC)Reply
  • Simple Bulleted list, without the statement currently above the table, per the MoS. As a note, though, annotations are not always original research. You can provide a summary of their role in the film with the film itself as the source, so long as there is no interpretation added (i.e. if the film says X character is 12, then you can say Actor Y as Character X, a 12 year old boy, or you can expand by sourcing from reviews or other sources if they speak to something specific about a character. AnmaFinotera (talk) 05:49, 19 April 2008 (UTC)Reply
  • Simpled bulleted list. Annotations are not OR if any reasonable person could draw the conclusion from the film (ie. Bob is fat, Dave is a kid, etc.) dihydrogen monoxide (H2O) 09:29, 20 April 2008 (UTC)Reply
  • Simple bulleted list - I strongly feel cast lists should not be presented in the form of a table, which in my opinion is unsightly and not very encyclopedic in nature. MovieMadness (talk) 15:35, 21 April 2008 (UTC)Reply
Comment: As I previously have mentioned in other discussions, I think a well-written plot synopsis should include character descriptions, thus rendering them unnecessary in cast lists. MovieMadness (talk) 16:21, 21 April 2008 (UTC)Reply
True that there is redundancy, but is it not possible that some people may want to know the gist of a character without reading the Plot section? After all, the Plot section tells everything about the film, where the Cast section usually describes the role in a non-plot manner. (For example, we wouldn't say, "Bob is a 35-year-old soldier who is killed at the end of the film.") —Erik (talkcontrib) - 16:23, 21 April 2008 (UTC)Reply
Perhaps I'm wrong, but I think the average person who uses Wikipedia as a resource tends to read the entire article about the subject he's researching. MovieMadness (talk) 17:38, 21 April 2008 (UTC)Reply
  • Simple bulleted list is OK by me. I think a brief description of each character is acceptable -- just make the wording indisputable by avoiding flavor in writing. Like others have said, if it's unanimous that someone is a 12-year-old boy, then that can be mentioned. Just to reflect the type of role played. I don't think there should be a major concern with OR for this film article that won't be flooded with creative writers like some upcoming tentpole films' articles will be. —Erik (talkcontrib) - 16:15, 21 April 2008 (UTC)Reply

Since there appears to be unanimous consensus for changing the table to a simple bulleted list, I have gone ahead and done so. --J.L.W.S. The Special One (talk) 13:37, 22 April 2008 (UTC)Reply