Talk:Holly Steam Combination Company/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 20:37, 21 August 2020 (UTC)

Shall review this article. MWright96 (talk) 20:37, 21 August 2020 (UTC)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Lead

• "was an American company that was the first steam heating company" - try to avoid repetition of the same word in the same sentence

•  Done--Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:29, 22 August 2020 (UTC)

• Mention who Birdsill Holly was for the uninitiated

•  Done--Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:29, 22 August 2020 (UTC)

• Perhaps expand the lead to state what happened to the company in its final years

•  Done--Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:29, 22 August 2020 (UTC)

History

• "Birdsill Holly began working on a district steam system" - same issue as the second point in the lead section

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:49, 22 August 2020 (UTC)

• " The following year Holly then constructed" - I don't believe the word "then" is needed here

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:49, 22 August 2020 (UTC)

• "The system of 3 miles of supply" - how about using the template on the text in bold?

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:49, 22 August 2020 (UTC)

• "This heating system had a greater energy efficiency than the method then in use of individual boilers to heat individual buildings. The new heating system concept attracted the attention of interested investors." - consider merging these two sentences together

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 12:15, 22 August 2020 (UTC)

• "This heating system had a greater energy efficiency than the method then in use of individual boilers" - method of using

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 12:15, 22 August 2020 (UTC)

• "The Holly heating systems first used wood insulated pipe.[9] The steam was distributed using high duty pumping engines.[10]" - perhaps merging these two sentences might help matters?

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 12:15, 22 August 2020 (UTC)

• "He ultimately obtained over 150 patents by 1888 refining steam heat techniques and methods of distribution." - the text in bold might be better off placed at the start or end of this sentence

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 12:15, 22 August 2020 (UTC)

• Wikilink Brush Swan Electric Light Company to the relevant article

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 12:15, 22 August 2020 (UTC)

• "By 1894 the Holly steam systems had been installed in over" - more than

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 12:15, 22 August 2020 (UTC)

• Maybe this source [1] has additional information that can be inserted into the article?

•  Done Expanded article. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 14:23, 22 August 2020 (UTC)

Demise

• "The Holly Steam Combination Company was reorganized in 1882. It became then the American District Steam Company (ADSC)." - these two sentences could be better off merged as one

 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 14:39, 22 August 2020 (UTC)

Sources

• "Heating and ventilating magazine Company" - the words in bold should begin with capital letters

 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 14:39, 22 August 2020 (UTC)

Will put the review on hold to allow the nominator to address/query the points raised above. MWright96 (talk) 11:03, 22 August 2020 (UTC)

@MWright96: - All issues have been addressed. Can you take another look. Thanks. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 14:39, 22 August 2020 (UTC)

@Doug Coldwell: Now promoting to GA class. I've made changes to the new source added into the article. MWright96 (talk) 16:40, 22 August 2020 (UTC)