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Peer Comments edit
History edit
The Harrison West Society edit
1st paragraph: "for quotations within quotations, use double quote marks outermost and, working inward, alternate single with double quote marks." -- Wikipedia Manual of Style
bullet points: "protect our residential areas and bolster our commercial strip." Incorrect writing perspective - use "their" instead of "our"
This section seems to promote the Harrison West Society from a biased perspective. Would benefit from a more objective point of view
Geography edit
Citation required
Structures and Landmarks edit
"boasts two cafes with wi-fi connections, so you can enjoy our neighborhood over your favorite drink and sandwich."
Use of opinionated language, use of "you" and "your"
Entertainment edit
"excellent place for any type of recreation"
Use of opinionated language
Education edit
"even that of Ohio"
use of "even" is unnecessary, implies bias
Gallery edit
Integrate images into article
References edit
Sources must be reformatted to appear here. Use inline citations.
Additional Comments edit
Article is well organized. It could benefit from fewer direct quotations - these make the article seem biased towards the opinion of the source material. The Article could integrate more images within the text. The lead paragraph is concise and well-written.
-- Steven.bow.13 (talk) 23:57, 3 December 2014 (UTC)
Instructor Comments edit
Well-written edit
- Refer to the manual of style guidelines which emphasis on writing style
Verifiable with no original research edit
- References need to be formatted properly.
- You over use quotations. They should only be used in specific instances.
- GoodVibes is not a reputable reference. Please Use US Census Data.
Broad in its coverage edit
- Wanting more detail on Parks,
- Info on outside attractions is good.
- Need more info on neighborhood attractions (I know that there are several bar/restaurants in the area that are notable).
- Article does a good job of staying focused, but it very narrow in approach.
Neutral edit
- You need to edit out the commentary. This is VERY important.
Stable edit
- If you follow the above four items, you article will be.
Illustrated edit
- Move images from gallery into main space of the article.
- Provide captions for those.
- Good use of place infobox, but insert a image that is representative of the neighborhood and take photos yourself.
Kenitzer.1 (talk) 14:36, 4 December 2014 (UTC)
2nd draft edit
Notes from class editor: You don't need to say how far away everything is in terms of walking vs. driving. You should link to the pages of the Arena District and Short North when talking about those places. We also don't need to know what percentage of Columbus's total population lives in Harrison West. Kowalski.118 (talk) 13:10, 9 December 2014 (UTC)