Talk:HMS Woolwich (F80)

Latest comment: 10 years ago by Tomobe03 in topic GA Review

GA Review edit

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Reviewer: Tomobe03 (talk · contribs) 11:32, 9 June 2013 (UTC)Reply

I'll review this article shortly.--Tomobe03 (talk) 11:32, 9 June 2013 (UTC)Reply

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MOS and prose:

  • Should 4 in 4-inch (102 mm) gun be spelled out similar to {two-pounder guns?
  • I'd prefer changing Also during the war several radars were added. to "Several radars were also added during the war."
  • When I read ... while circumnavigating Africa, she had to put into Mombasa, Kenya for repairs to her boilers before she arrived in November., I was wondering where was she sailing to. Even though the first part of the sentence says she was deployed to the Med, knowing little on the RN in the WWII, I assumed a ship would sail from the UK to the Med via Gibraltar. It took me a moment to realise that ships might have been compelled to circumnavigate Africa to reach Suez. Perhaps it would be prudent to end the sentence in "... before she arrived in Alexandria in November." (or whichever port it was she reached). I'm not bent on this one, but thought to point out a possible point of confusion among non-expert readers.
  • Lead is on a shorter side, but within provisions of WP:LEAD (no action required)

Overall, a nice article with little (if anything) to mend before it is passed.--Tomobe03 (talk) 14:06, 11 June 2013 (UTC)Reply

Thanks for the review, all issues addressed.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 15:05, 11 June 2013 (UTC)Reply
All clear then. Cheers!--Tomobe03 (talk) 15:08, 11 June 2013 (UTC)Reply