Talk:HMS Amazon (1795)/GA1
Latest comment: 6 months ago by Pickersgill-Cunliffe in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk · contribs) 18:27, 21 October 2023 (UTC)
I'll take a look at this shortly. Welcome back to GAN! Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 18:27, 21 October 2023 (UTC)
- Hi @Pickersgill-Cunliffe:, are you still pondering over this? --Ykraps (talk) 05:13, 27 October 2023 (UTC)
- @Ykraps: Work constraints combined with a bad cold mean I probably won't get to this until Sunday. Apologies that I can't do it quicker. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 12:00, 27 October 2023 (UTC)
Prelim edit
- Main battery is a duplicated link
- Article is stable
- File:Edward Pellew, 1st Viscount Exmouth by James Northcote.jpg needs US PD
- Earwig reports copyvio unlikely
Lede and infobox edit
- Suggest adding her class to the lede, e.g. "HMS Amazon was a 36-gun Amazon-class frigate..."
- Include Rule's knighthood in his wikilink for consistency
- Suggest specifically mentioning the French Revolutionary Wars in the lede
- Ibid Action of 13 January 1797
- Manning & Walker p. 79 have her namesake as the Amazons, if you like
- Her commissioning date is not specifically mentioned in main text
- Add her class to the "type" parameter
- Suggest using template for tons burthen, e.g. 93367⁄94 (bm)
- Stipulate the type of gun in the infobox
Construction and armament edit
- Move 18-pounder long gun link to first mention
- Sir William Rule
- Suggest adding draught (Winfield has this)
- Suggest not shortening "pdr"
- "Amazon-class frigates" needs italics
- Some of note A could be added to the main text, as it is directly relevant to the ship context
Service edit
- Link commissioned
- Link squadron
- "the 36-gun Concorde." don't need the full stop
- "13 April 1796" repeated year
- "Pellew," don't need the comma
- Give Unite's gun count for consistency
- "when the 40-gun"
- "12 June 1796" repeated year
- Ibid guns for Phoebe
- "Indefatigable," don't need the comma
- "blockading fleet"?
- Any more context on Amazon's role in the attempted invasion of Ireland?
- There's not a huge amount to say. Amazon had been sent to apprise John Colpoys, Admiral of the Western Squadron, so wasn't on the scene. I've added a link to the expedition and I could give a bit more background info, if you like. --Ykraps (talk) 08:27, 5 November 2023 (UTC)
- My mistake, Amazon was sent to England; Phoebe was sent to Colpoys. --Ykraps (talk) 09:04, 5 November 2023 (UTC)
- I've added a bit more background. See what you think. --Ykraps (talk) 20:11, 6 November 2023 (UTC)
- Really need a location stipulated for the beginning of the action of 13 January 1797
- "
CaptainReynolds"
References edit
- References look good. AGF for some print sources.
@Ykraps: Hi, that's all I have for now. Will await the last of your responses. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 14:16, 4 November 2023 (UTC)
- @Pickersgill-Cunliffe:, Do you have anymore comments? Thanks. --Ykraps (talk) 05:51, 8 November 2023 (UTC)
- @Ykraps: Passing this article as satisfying the GA criteria. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 18:46, 9 November 2023 (UTC)