Talk:HMS Amazon (1795)/GA1

Latest comment: 6 months ago by Pickersgill-Cunliffe in topic GA Review

GA Review edit

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Reviewer: Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk · contribs) 18:27, 21 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

I'll take a look at this shortly. Welcome back to GAN! Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 18:27, 21 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

Hi @Pickersgill-Cunliffe:, are you still pondering over this? --Ykraps (talk) 05:13, 27 October 2023 (UTC)Reply
@Ykraps: Work constraints combined with a bad cold mean I probably won't get to this until Sunday. Apologies that I can't do it quicker. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 12:00, 27 October 2023 (UTC)Reply
No Problem. --Ykraps (talk) 07:29, 28 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

Prelim edit

Lede and infobox edit

  • Suggest adding her class to the lede, e.g. "HMS Amazon was a 36-gun Amazon-class frigate..."
    Done. --Ykraps (talk) 20:46, 30 October 2023 (UTC)Reply
  • Include Rule's knighthood in his wikilink for consistency
    Done (If you mean consistent with Sir Edward Pellew). --Ykraps (talk) 20:46, 30 October 2023 (UTC)Reply
  • Suggest specifically mentioning the French Revolutionary Wars in the lede
    Done. --Ykraps (talk) 20:46, 30 October 2023 (UTC)Reply
  • Ibid Action of 13 January 1797
    Done. --Ykraps (talk) 20:46, 30 October 2023 (UTC)Reply
  • Manning & Walker p. 79 have her namesake as the Amazons, if you like
    I don't appear to have that book. Do you have the full citation? --Ykraps (talk) 21:58, 30 October 2023 (UTC)Reply
    Manning, T. D.; Walker, C. F. (1959). British Warship Names. London: Putnam. OCLC 213798232.
    Added. --Ykraps (talk) 20:04, 31 October 2023 (UTC)Reply
  • Her commissioning date is not specifically mentioned in main text
    Added. --Ykraps (talk) 21:38, 30 October 2023 (UTC)Reply
  • Add her class to the "type" parameter
    Added. --Ykraps (talk) 21:50, 30 October 2023 (UTC)Reply
  • Suggest using template for tons burthen, e.g. 9336794 (bm)
    Done. --Ykraps (talk) 21:38, 30 October 2023 (UTC)Reply
  • Stipulate the type of gun in the infobox
    Done. --Ykraps (talk) 21:38, 30 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

Construction and armament edit

  • Move 18-pounder long gun link to first mention
    Done. --Ykraps (talk) 21:32, 3 November 2023 (UTC)Reply
  • Sir William Rule
    Done. --Ykraps (talk) 21:32, 3 November 2023 (UTC)Reply
  • Suggest adding draught (Winfield has this)
    Done. --Ykraps (talk) 09:22, 4 November 2023 (UTC)Reply
  • Suggest not shortening "pdr"
    Done. --Ykraps (talk) 09:22, 4 November 2023 (UTC)Reply
  • "Amazon-class frigates" needs italics
    Done. --Ykraps (talk) 21:32, 3 November 2023 (UTC)Reply
  • Some of note A could be added to the main text, as it is directly relevant to the ship context
    Yes, thanks, I'd been contemplating that myself. Is that enough do you think? --Ykraps (talk) 21:32, 3 November 2023 (UTC)Reply

Service edit

  • Link commissioned
    Done. --Ykraps (talk) 21:28, 4 November 2023 (UTC)Reply
  • Link squadron
    Done. --Ykraps (talk) 21:28, 4 November 2023 (UTC)Reply
  • "the 36-gun Concorde." don't need the full stop
    Yeh, don't know how that got in there. --Ykraps (talk) 21:28, 4 November 2023 (UTC)Reply
  • "13 April 1796" repeated year
    Removed. --Ykraps (talk) 21:28, 4 November 2023 (UTC)Reply
  • "Pellew," don't need the comma
    Don't know what that's doing there either. Removed. --Ykraps (talk) 21:28, 4 November 2023 (UTC)Reply
  • Give Unite's gun count for consistency
    Done. --Ykraps (talk) 21:47, 4 November 2023 (UTC)Reply
  • "when the 40-gun"
    Done. --Ykraps (talk) 21:47, 4 November 2023 (UTC)Reply
  • "12 June 1796" repeated year
    Done. --Ykraps (talk) 21:47, 4 November 2023 (UTC)Reply
  • Ibid guns for Phoebe
    Done. --Ykraps (talk) 21:47, 4 November 2023 (UTC)Reply
  • "Indefatigable," don't need the comma
    Sorry, can you be more precise? I can't see the instance you're referring to. --Ykraps (talk) 09:22, 5 November 2023 (UTC)Reply
  • "blockading fleet"?
    Yes. Done. --Ykraps (talk) 09:22, 5 November 2023 (UTC)Reply
  • Any more context on Amazon's role in the attempted invasion of Ireland?
    There's not a huge amount to say. Amazon had been sent to apprise John Colpoys, Admiral of the Western Squadron, so wasn't on the scene. I've added a link to the expedition and I could give a bit more background info, if you like. --Ykraps (talk) 08:27, 5 November 2023 (UTC)Reply
    My mistake, Amazon was sent to England; Phoebe was sent to Colpoys. --Ykraps (talk) 09:04, 5 November 2023 (UTC)Reply
    I've added a bit more background. See what you think. --Ykraps (talk) 20:11, 6 November 2023 (UTC)Reply
  • Really need a location stipulated for the beginning of the action of 13 January 1797
    Done. --Ykraps (talk) 08:27, 5 November 2023 (UTC)Reply
  • "Captain Reynolds"
    Removed. --Ykraps (talk) 21:28, 4 November 2023 (UTC)Reply

References edit

  • References look good. AGF for some print sources.

@Ykraps: Hi, that's all I have for now. Will await the last of your responses. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 14:16, 4 November 2023 (UTC)Reply

@Pickersgill-Cunliffe:, Do you have anymore comments? Thanks. --Ykraps (talk) 05:51, 8 November 2023 (UTC)Reply
@Ykraps: Passing this article as satisfying the GA criteria. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 18:46, 9 November 2023 (UTC)Reply