Talk:Dunhill (cigarette)
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"Africa" section: clarity of first sentence edit
The first sentence of this section makes no sense as written: "Despite South Africa having one of the toughest anti-tobacco laws in Africa, the company failed to comply with the law, pushing on in both government fronts and covert advertising and promotions." I'm not familiar with SA's anti-tobacco laws but if they are indeed super-tough, it would make more sense to replace "Despite" with "Due to". On the other hand, if SA's anti-tobacco laws are weak, a more coherent sentence would replace "toughest" with "weakest", thus: Despite South Africa having one of the weakest anti-tobacco laws in Africa, the company failed to comply with the law, pushing on in both government fronts and covert advertising and promotions. It would also be useful to expand/explain what is meant by "...pushing on in both government fronts and covert advertising and promotions." Examples would help. Namlit67 (talk) 09:08, 17 December 2023 (UTC)
- @Namlit67
- I skimmed the source and apparently SA does have the toughest tobacco laws in Africa. So maybe the quirk in the sentence is in the "failed to comply" part:
- "Despite South Africa having one of the toughest anti-tobacco laws in Africa, the company managed to circumvent the law, pushing on in both government fronts and covert advertising and promotions."
- Halungg (talk) 14:29, 16 January 2024 (UTC)