Talk:Doug Kitani

Latest comment: 4 years ago by North8000 in topic Feedback from New Page Review process

Feedback from New Page Review process edit

Nice start! While I think that you have achieved neutral wording, the process of primarily doing a listing of listing development and achievements makes it read like a resume. You have a lot of sources to draw from to develop more article type prose and text from. That would further enhance the article. Sincerely, North8000 (talk) 23:37, 22 April 2020 (UTC)Reply