Talk:David O'Connor (equestrian)/GA1
Latest comment: 10 years ago by Dana boomer in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 18:26, 31 July 2013 (UTC)
Initial comments
- Not "b." but "born".
- Spread out the "O'Connor" and "he" in the lead. A little lop-sided right now.
- " in Washington, D.C..[1]" avoid the double period.
- "marking a historical Olympic moment." explanation required.
- " O'Connor is an avid " .... not so sure we need this personal POV stuff.
- I thought we typically italicised horse names, but I'm not sure. Please correct me if I'm wrong.
- You're wrong (grin and smiles), we don't italicise horse names. Nowhere on WPEQ anyway, or anywhere else that I know of. I'll let Dana handle the rest of these, I'm just lurking... --MontanaBW
- Glad to hear it. I blame Frankie Dettori's article for that. The Rambling Man (talk) 21:02, 2 August 2013 (UTC)
- You're wrong (grin and smiles), we don't italicise horse names. Nowhere on WPEQ anyway, or anywhere else that I know of. I'll let Dana handle the rest of these, I'm just lurking... --MontanaBW
- "as an alternate" being a Brit, I'm sure what this means, is it a substitute? Could you link it?
- "5th place" -> "fifth place" etc (for numbers below 10).
- "riding Giltedge, rode to an individual 6th" riding.. rode... repetitive.
- "CCI4*" is there a link for this, what does it mean?
- "Chef d’équipe" link?
- Link/explain FEI.
- "Also in 2002, O'Conner " typo? Check others.
- You use USEA before explaining/linking it.
- Consider piping the reflinks to 30em so it doesn't occupy so much space.
- Author names, either first last, or last, first. Be consistent.
That's a first run through, I'll place it on hold for a week. The Rambling Man (talk) 17:56, 2 August 2013 (UTC)
@Dana, let me know if we need to add any of the above terms to Glossary of equestrian terms for a link where one is needed and we have no article. Montanabw(talk) 20:49, 2 August 2013 (UTC)
- TRM, thanks for the review and comments! I believe I have addressed all of your comments above? Montana, I added one definition to the glossary page (with a link from the article), and found good links for everything else. Thanks for the reminder about that page! Dana boomer (talk) 23:40, 3 August 2013 (UTC)