Talk:Chelsea F.C. 2–4 Bradford City A.F.C./GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Kosack (talk · contribs) 20:02, 8 July 2019 (UTC)

I'll review this as soon as possible. Kosack (talk) 20:02, 8 July 2019 (UTC)

Lead

• "Chelsea were leading 2–1 up", this sentence is repeating itself really. They were either leading 2-1 or were 2-1 up, preferably the former.
• "the tables turned", try to avoid using informal phrases such as this. "However, Bradford staged a comeback..." perhaps? Adjusting the rest of the sentence accordingly.
• "would each score a goal", this part doesn't seem to fit the tense of the rest of the sentence. Each scored would seem more appropriate.
• "and thus allowing the Bantams", replace and with a comma.
• "It also ended at-the-time Chelsea manager, José Mourinho's, and Chelsea's hopes of winning a quadruple that season". I think this sentence needs reorganising. There's no need for "at-the-time" as eventually this would become true of everyone involved and the repetition of Chelsea is a bit clunky. Perhaps move Mourinho to the end of the sentence, for example "It also ended Chelsea's hopes of winning a quadruple that season under manager José Mourinho"?
• "on that very same day" > on the same day.
• "And the day before", avoid starting a sentence with and.
• "Manchester United had held a 0–0 draw with Fourth tier side, Cambridge United", this would seem an odd turn of phrase given that you're implying this result was also an upset. "Manchester United were held to a 0-0 draw by... "?

Background

• "On the other hand", another slightly too informal phrase. Conversely would be a better fit perhaps?
• The division had not undergone its rebrand to EFL League One at this point so League One would be sufficient.
• "Mourinho promoted him to the first team", the main body is starting afresh from the lead really so at this point an unitiated reader may have no idea who Mourinho is.
• "He would've made his senior debut for them that season", this phrase seems a little presumptuous?
• End of the first paragraph is unsourced.
• Linked to the point made three above, Chelsea manager can be dropped from Jose Mourinho's press conference if the earlier point is fulfilled.

Route to the match

• Nit-picking somewhat really but is it really a bye for Chelsea in the third round replay if they actually just won the first tie?
• Millwall's table has them as 3-0 winners in the third round but the third paragraph of the lead states it was 4-0.

Summary

• Goal attempt is a phrase I can't say I've heard before. Should it be attempt on goal?
• Filipe Morais is linked in the previous section, no need to repeat link him here per WP:OVERLINK.
• "kicked it out of play. Oscar took the corner kick and kicked it towards the box, but Darby headed the ball back in the same direction. Oscar took another corner kick and kicked it towards the goal again", five uses of kick/kicked in two sentences. Try to avoid too much repitition like this.
• "For the next two minutes", in the next two minutes.
• "Chelsea dominated possession of the ball from the 23rd minute until the 37th minute", this seems like an oddly specific timeframe.
• "On the 38th minute", in the 38th...
• "Like always, Filipe Morais took the free kick", how do we know this is like always? This could be bordering on WP:OR.
• "scored a screamer", need strong sourcing for a description like that.
• "The referees added 2 minutes of injury time to the first half, but nothing happened besides a few missed shots on target and a few free kicks", is this worthy of inclusion? There's probably a better way to wrap up the half.

I'm halting the review of the match summary section there as the same theme of issues continues but I have noticed that this entire descriptive section is unsourced.

Post-match

• "with the Bantams' fans chanting "Easy, Easy" to mock the Chelsea fans", is this really notable? I must have heard this chant a thousand times at matches.
• "ashamed with his face looking down", the only source in the paragraph that follows this doesn't appear a to support the looking down part and we should probably clarify that "ashamed" was his own quote rather than a comment on his demeanour.
• "for their amazing performance", if amazing is a quote it needs attributing, if not it needs to be toned down.

References

• None of the references have an accessdate.

I was hoping to leave this open to allow issues to be fixed during the review but the unsourced match section has exacerbated issues and I believe there's too much work reasonably expected to be done. If you wish to fix the issues I have listed above, I would also suggest submitting the article for review by a member of the WP:GOCE before resubmitting. Unfortunately, I'm failing this as I believe it's too far away from meeting GA criteria 1 and 2 for now. If you have any further questions, don't hesitate to message me. Kosack (talk) 20:11, 8 July 2019 (UTC)