Talk:Chasing Time (song)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: IndianBio (talk · contribs) 14:20, 21 December 2015 (UTC)

Hey Azealia, i will be reviewing this article. —Indian:BIO ^{[ ChitChat ]} 14:20, 21 December 2015 (UTC)

Thankyou, I look forward to it! Azealia911 _talk 14:26, 21 December 2015 (UTC)

Any chance you'll be getting to this soon, IndianBio? Azealia911 _talk 20:14, 29 December 2015 (UTC)

I Don't think so. Only after 1st January. Will that be fine? —Indian:BIO ^{[ ChitChat ]} 09:37, 30 December 2015 (UTC)

No problem. Azealia911 _talk 19:41, 30 December 2015 (UTC)

Anything going to be happening with this soon, IndianBio? Azealia911 _talk 17:24, 5 January 2016 (UTC)

Prose review

• for her debut studio album Broke with Expensive Taste (2014) --> for her debut studio album, Broke with Expensive Taste (2014)

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• Lyrically, the track describes Banks recovering from a breakup --> Is it "describes" or the song talks about Banks' recovery?

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• To promote the track even further, Banks held a contest --> Banks also held a contest...

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• I'm not seeing hip-hop and house as genres being discussed in the composition. So they should be removed from the Infobox.

• I've removed 'hip-hop', but house is mentioned by three sources, "diva house music", "pop-diva hook she lays on top of Nineties house synth stabs" and "crisp house production".

• Approximately a year later, she handed a complete version of Broke with Expensive Taste in to the labels --> Approximately a year later, she submitted the complete version of Broke with Expensive Taste to her labels

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• Banks initially thought it would receive favorable reception from the labels; however, the representatives told Banks --> Banks initially thought it would receive favorable reception from the labels, but the representatives informed Banks...

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• Banks revealed that the song was conceived when she first handed in a copy of Broke with Expensive Taste to her then-labels, to which their reply was that the songs were average --> Can we somehow include this information differently? Because it was just mentioned in the prior para that the label rejected her songs.

• Altered the wording so it doesn't sound like a carbon copy, let me know if that's still not ok. Azealia911 _talk

• Rolling Stone described the song as --> In such cases, please mention "who" from Rolling Stone made that comment, in this case Jon Dolan

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• I think my main concern regarding the composition section is how much it just goes into quotes instead of paraphrasing them. So much so that it actually moves from the composition aspect to the critical assessment. And reading the quotes I would say its pretty simple to paraphrase them in your own words.

• Re-written some of the section. Azealia911 _talk

• TIME --> Time per the article and include the author names here wherever applicable.

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• The chart section you can use directly the Billboard charts for Azealia. Dance club and Japan. No need to have duplicate references.

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Stopping here for now and let you work on the comments. Cheers. —Indian:BIO ^{[ ChitChat ]} 14:22, 7 January 2016 (UTC)

Thankyou for the initial comments, I'm ready for more whenever you want to throw them out there. Azealia911 _talk 16:13, 7 January 2016 (UTC)

• Just one more comment. Can you use a cropped version of File:Director Marc Klasfeld and Justin Timberlake.jpeg? That shows the director more clearly and points the picture towards the article for our right alignment. We are then ready to pass it. —Indian:BIO ^{[ ChitChat ]} 18:54, 12 January 2016 (UTC)

Is there a cropped version readily available? Would you be willing to upload that yourself? My apologies, but unless it's a straightforward cover art, images aren't really my thing. I'm more than happy to replace the image though. Azealia911 _talk 19:05, 12 January 2016 (UTC)

Not a great deal. I'm happy to pass it without that also. —Indian:BIO ^{[ ChitChat ]} 13:36, 18 January 2016 (UTC)