Talk:Biomedical Advanced Research and Development Authority

Latest comment: 2 years ago by MarioGom in topic Undisclosed paid edits

Sounds like a press release edit

I agree. It sounds like it was written by someone employed by the agency trying to sell its high points. I have added sections to the article and removed material on Rick Bright already covered on his Wikipedia article page. Material on this whistleblower complaint has been moved to a new section. I have also added many references and factual, historical information. BARDA does unusual (and good) work, so it is difficult for some accounts to not sound like a press release. I have begun to try to make the existing language sound more neutral. I believe this issue can be resolved by adding secondary sources. Abelian (talk) 16:45, 23 May 2020 (UTC)Reply

This page on the Biomedical Advanced Research and Development Authority sounds like , ie reads like, a press release. Let's fix that. Richard8081 (talk) 16:58, 7 November 2010 (UTC)Reply

Check this out: "BARDA’s Strategic Science Team helps bring innovation to our programs. This team is the focal point for discussions with the creators of new technologies, ideas, and products. Together with the program managers, they seek ways to integrate innovative science into the development and production of medical countermeasures." Pretty convincing example of how you can definitely be a little TOO slick, and your believability -- authenticity even --- just vanishes like the fog. Trouble is, this is the Government speaking, so you really have to wonder how this upbeat tone even creeps into the prose. I guess "medical countermeasures" will always carry a sinister overtone, so you have to coat it with rah-rah to get any kind of buy-in from a fearful public. The anthrax scare was, after all, more than just a scare-- several people died!Richard8081 (talk) 17:05, 7 November 2010 (UTC)Reply

Copyright edit

Huge sections of this article are directly copied from news articles and other wiki articles. That needs to change.--Shibbolethink ( ) 19:18, 3 August 2015 (UTC)Reply

Contested deletion edit

This page is not unambiguously promotional, because...this is a massive government corporation that dolls out billions in research funds to civilian and government labs. It has notability from mentions in news articles alone: https://www.google.com/webhp?sourceid=chrome-instant&ion=1&espv=2&ie=UTF-8#q=BARDA&tbm=nws

If you think this article should be fixed, okay. But it deserves to exist and I'd love to help you fix it.-Shibbolethink ( ) 07:03, 20 June 2016 (UTC)Reply

I agree. I think the 2010 "promotional content" tag is no longer relevant and I am removing it. Also added more content today to expand and improve this article. --Paultimothyjones714 (talk) 17:40, 14 March 2017 (UTC)Reply

Suggestion edit

I think Rick Bright should be a separate page. See [1], [2], etc. My very best wishes (talk) 22:59, 23 April 2020 (UTC)Reply

Let's wait and see if he actually files the whistleblower complaint, as promised. If he does, the story will develop, and it will be notable enough for creating the page. My very best wishes (talk) 04:46, 27 April 2020 (UTC)Reply

Quality and Importance edit

Given the authority’s role as a sort of venture capital fund within the federal government and its role in getting important but ordinarily not very profitable medications/vaccines, it would be nice to see the article’s quality and importance rise on Wikipedia’s scales. It could benefit from help from an insider who understancs how to write factual, neutral, nonadvocacy articles. Abelian (talk) 16:57, 23 May 2020 (UTC)Reply

Article structure edit

I have added historical information on the agency’s formation, legislative history, budget and responses to pandemic and biomedical threat. Abelian (talk) 16:57, 23 May 2020 (UTC)Reply

This page does not read like an encyclopedia article. It reads like a summary of recent events. Leadership should not be the first topic, but rather the history leading up to the agency formation and/or any preceeding or sister agencies. Relevant topics as well would be the organizational structure, relation to HHS, NIH, CDC, employees, budget (with relation to each year), manner of funding, how industry projects are funded, public-private partnerships and so on. This is an encyclopedia article, not a news report. Also relevant would be comparison with and relations with international health agencies

The item referring to Dr. Bright is relevant, but this should be contextualized to 2020, under say a topic such as “Controversies” (say). This information should be referenced in a factual, neutral, apolitical way. Phrases like “most recent” are inappropriate as they will soon no longer be accurate. Abelian (talk) 18:28, 14 May 2020 (UTC)Reply

Undisclosed paid edits edit

I have added an {{undisclosed paid}} tag to this article because of extensive editing by a UPE sockfarm, please see Wikipedia:Sockpuppet investigations/Frost joyce for evidence. Users relevant to this page include: Paultimothyjones714 (talk · contribs), Stephenthrompson (talk · contribs), Swunalightyear (talk · contribs) The article will need a thorough review ensuring due weight, neutral language, and use of reliable sources before the tag is removed. MarioGom (talk) 11:42, 22 November 2021 (UTC)Reply