Talk:B3 (classification)/GA1

Latest comment: 10 years ago by LauraHale in topic GA Review

GA Review edit

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 17:17, 8 July 2013 (UTC)Reply

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  • "disability sport classification for blind sport" can we remove one of the "sport"s?
It is not used outside of sport, so not entirely certain. --LauraHale (talk) 11:40, 9 July 2013 (UTC)Reply
I meant something along the lines of "disability classification for blind sport"? The Rambling Man (talk) 13:25, 9 July 2013 (UTC)Reply
My misunderstanding. Fixed. --LauraHale (talk) 20:35, 10 July 2013 (UTC)Reply
Done. --LauraHale (talk) 11:40, 9 July 2013 (UTC)Reply
Done. --LauraHale (talk) 11:48, 9 July 2013 (UTC)Reply
  • "classification is LTA-B3. athletics where the comparative" probably should be a comma.
Done. --LauraHale (talk) 11:48, 9 July 2013 (UTC)Reply
  • Is there a reason our IBSA article calls it "International Blind Sports Federation"?
Fixed link. --LauraHale (talk) 11:48, 9 July 2013 (UTC)Reply
  • "This classification was first..." reinfroce subject, i.e. "The B3 classification was first..."
Done. --LauraHale (talk) 11:48, 9 July 2013 (UTC)Reply
  • "functional and evidence based" -> "functional- and evidence-based".
Done. --LauraHale (talk) 11:48, 9 July 2013 (UTC)Reply
  • "though the B3 class is comparable to the IBSA created class" I thought the B3 was the class created by the IBSA?
Clarified the wording.--LauraHale (talk) 11:48, 9 July 2013 (UTC)Reply
Done. --LauraHale (talk) 11:48, 9 July 2013 (UTC)Reply
  • "whereas cycling and skiing do require a guide." -> "...skiing require one."
Done. --LauraHale (talk) 11:48, 9 July 2013 (UTC)Reply
Done. --LauraHale (talk) 12:29, 9 July 2013 (UTC)Reply
  • "The International Blind Sports Association (IBSA) defines..." and "The International Paralympic Committee" both of these have already been abbreviated in the preceding section, so use the abbreviations.
Not sure. Fixed link so it was not to a redirect. --LauraHale (talk) 12:29, 9 July 2013 (UTC)Reply
  • "This classification has parallels in other sports. For adaptive rowing, the comparable classification is LTA-B3.[10] For athletics, the class is T13.[11][12] The B3 equivalent for swimming is S13.[5]" merge that into the previous paragraph and reinforce "The B3 classification has parallels..."
Done. --LauraHale (talk) 12:29, 9 July 2013 (UTC)Reply
  • "During the actual evaluation" no need for "actual".
Removed. --LauraHale (talk) 12:29, 9 July 2013 (UTC)Reply
  • In general, there seems to be a lot repeated in this section from the lead, so perhaps trim the lead down a little.
Trimmed. --LauraHale (talk) 12:29, 9 July 2013 (UTC)Reply
  • Define and link FINA before using the abbreviation.
Fixed.--LauraHale (talk) 12:29, 9 July 2013 (UTC)Reply
Fixed. --LauraHale (talk) 13:00, 9 July 2013 (UTC)Reply
Fixed. --LauraHale (talk) 13:00, 9 July 2013 (UTC)Reply
  • "recognised" vs "meter" vs "utilized " - which variant of English is being used in this article?
Changed to American. My bad. I generally do UK/Aussie but obviously not paying as much attention as I should. --LauraHale (talk) 13:00, 9 July 2013 (UTC)Reply
  • "This classification traces its history"... "The B3 classification..."
Fixed. --LauraHale (talk) 13:00, 9 July 2013 (UTC)Reply
  • "When a cyclist is looking for a guide, they are encouraged to find one with a pace similar to their own" seems like common sense to me. Does it need to be reported here?
Yes, I think so because it is a point that comes up in literature about what is desirable for looking for in guides and then how you improve from there. --LauraHale (talk) 13:00, 9 July 2013 (UTC)Reply
  • The portal graphic is squashing all the references up, could it be placed elsewhere?
Not sure. No see alsos and no external links where they might otherwise be placed. Can remove. --LauraHale (talk) 13:00, 9 July 2013 (UTC)Reply
  • Check reference titles for correct use of WP:DASH i.e. date ranges etc should use an en-dash, not a hyphen.
Confused because my knowledge of dashes and hyphen usage is non-existent. --LauraHale (talk) 13:00, 9 July 2013 (UTC)Reply
  • Also, references which are PDF usually have format=pdf.
Fixed.LauraHale (talk) 13:00, 9 July 2013 (UTC)Reply
  • Be consistent with author names in the refs, e.g. is it First Name Surname or Surname, First Name?

The Rambling Man (talk) 11:32, 9 July 2013 (UTC)Reply

Fixed.LauraHale (talk) 13:00, 9 July 2013 (UTC)Reply

GA criteria edit

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose):   b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
    Prose issues as noted above.
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:  
    Not a bad start, I'll put it on hold while the comments are addressed. The Rambling Man (talk) 11:32, 9 July 2013 (UTC)Reply