Talk:Austin Church/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 20:44, 22 August 2020 (UTC)

Will review. MWright96 (talk) 20:44, 22 August 2020 (UTC)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Lead

• "He was a co-founder of the company that first made the product in America." - I think some clarification on what "made the product" means will help things here

 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:08, 23 August 2020 (UTC)

• "He was a businessman and involved" - think the word in bold is unneeded

 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:08, 23 August 2020 (UTC)

• The extra space between the paragraph and the early life section is not needed

 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:08, 23 August 2020 (UTC)

Infobox

• Church's death place is missing from the infobox

 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:08, 23 August 2020 (UTC)

Early life

• Better to use the née template on the term's sole mention

 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:17, 23 August 2020 (UTC)

• "However, Church did finish high school" - how about was able to finish

 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:17, 23 August 2020 (UTC)

• "In 1826 he moved and practiced in Cooperstown, New York, and in 1829 he moved to" - repetition of the word "moved"

 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:17, 23 August 2020 (UTC)

Career

• "10,000 tons" - the template is better off used here

 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:12, 23 August 2020 (UTC)

• "but a recent investor in the company objected." - what were the reasons (if any) given to this objection?

 Done - Williams quote. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:12, 23 August 2020 (UTC)

• Wikilink Vulcan to the appropriate article

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:12, 23 August 2020 (UTC)

• "to sell the Arm & Hammer Baking Soda product for hundreds of uses" - what sort of uses?

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:23, 23 August 2020 (UTC)

Philantrophy

• generous contributor to various charities across the country." - Any notable charities? Any type of charities?

 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:31, 24 August 2020 (UTC)

References

• newspapers.com is spelt as Newspapers.com

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:15, 24 August 2020 (UTC)

• Reference 6's page number should be D13 instead of 100

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:15, 24 August 2020 (UTC)

• Reference 7 should include United Press International as the agency

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:15, 24 August 2020 (UTC)

• Reference 9 is missing the author and the page number is C9 not 29

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:15, 24 August 2020 (UTC)

• Reference 13 is missing the author

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:15, 24 August 2020 (UTC)

• Reference 16 is missing the author

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:15, 24 August 2020 (UTC)

Sources

• "Rice, Randall Peter. Beyond The Bottom Line... Randall Peter Rice. The Arm & Hammer trademark came from another Church family business, Vulcan Spice Mills." - the date is missing here

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:22, 24 August 2020 (UTC)

Will put the review on hold to allow the nominator time to address/query the points raised above. MWright96 (talk) 16:56, 23 August 2020 (UTC)

@MWright96: All issues have been addressed. Can you take another look. Thanks. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:33, 24 August 2020 (UTC)

@Doug Coldwell: Now promoting to GA class. MWright96 (talk) 13:54, 24 August 2020 (UTC)