Talk:Applications of photovoltaics

Latest comment: 2 years ago by Compassionate727 in topic New page review

Article overview edit

This article was born from sections of Photovoltaics, Photovoltaic system, and Solar cell. These articles all extensively detailed their individual (but redundant) real-world applications in article sub-sections that began to balloon, I thought it best to split the topic off into its own separate article for clarity. Feel free to expand this list and/or categories as required. — Preceding unsigned comment added by DjDias (talkcontribs) 19:00, 22 March 2022 (UTC)Reply

New page review edit

This is pretty good for a first-time editor. Here are some points that could use improvement:

  • The tone is not quite correct for an encyclopedia article: it reads more like an essay, which is a different kind of writing, and no doubt one you are more used to as a college student. I'm not a particularly skilled content creator myself and am not sure I could give you advice on how to correct that, apart from reading other "Applications of …" articles, seeing what they are like, and imitating them.
  • On that specific note, the lead of an encyclopedia article serves a very different purpose from the introduction of an essay: while an essay intro is intended to introduce the background and significance of a topic, an encyclopedia article's lead serves only to summarize its body. The current lead, I feel, does not adequately do that.

I thought I had more to say, but I guess I'll leave it at that unless I think of something else. Compassionate727 (T·C) 22:24, 28 March 2022 (UTC)Reply