Talk:Anita Mui/GA1

GA Review

GA review (see here for criteria)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS):

• The intro is way too short per WP:LEAD for an article this size it should be at least two paragraphs long, and this is barely one.
• "Mui was the youngest daughter of a family with five children.[5] She lost her father at the age of five. At an early age she had to provide for her siblings, dropping out of school to do so. Her mother ran a bar, but it had burnt down." This whole section needs work, for one it is too short to have its own section and it just feels too sharp and to the point. Try something like: "Mui had a disruptive childhood, she was the youngest daughter among a family of five children. Her father died when she was five years old and when she was [insert age] she began to provide for her family, dropping out of school to do so. Following this, when she was [insert age] her mother's bar burnt down." You should then combine this with the "Career" section.
• There are a lot of issues with prose in the whole article mainly with the layout and presentation of the information. It's usually very short sentences and paragraphs with differentiating information that doesn't seem to link together. For example:

"Mui first entered show business at the age of five.[8][4] She performed Chinese operas and pop songs in theatres and the streets.[8][4] She won the first New Talent Singing Awards in 1982 with the song "The Windy Season" (風的季節), beating over 3,000 contestants."

This paragraph is just 3 separate statements with a wide differentiating range. The sentences are too short and don't link well. You also have two consecutive sentences beginning with "She" which is never a good thing. I advise a thorough copyedit of the entire article because it contains bad prose throughout.

• With the sheer length of the "Discography" and "Filmography" sections I advise you to create two separate articles for them because they dominate the article. It is also unclear of what the releases are in the "Discography" section wether they are singles, albums, DVDs, live albums. So I advise you create Anita Mui discography and Anita Mui filmography articles respectively.

Done. Pandacomics (talk) 00:36, 14 July 2008 (UTC)

I expanded on the intro and expanded a little bit more here and there. I also tried to make the sentences sound more together. Please let me know if this is smooth enough. Benjwong (talk) 07:11, 14 July 2008 (UTC)

1. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

2. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

   I feel the whole article is very short considering the extensive career the woman has seemed to have had. I feel that all areas could be expanded upon, but I am unfamiliar with the subject and cannot judge how well sources may be.

Interestingly I have thought of that too. The problem is that there really aren't anymore reliable sources that can give this article any new content. One possibility is to expand without references, such as openly talking about what the movies were about etc. Who she worked with etc. Benjwong (talk) 07:11, 14 July 2008 (UTC)

1. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

2. It is stable.

   No edit wars etc.:

3. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

   Image:AnitaMuiFinalConcert2.jpg is not permitted for use within this article per the licensing; "for identification and critical commentary on the station ID or program and its contents" the image may only be used in an article about the source which you got the image from.

This thing about this article is that she passed away even before wikipedia fairuse image concept even existed. I have spoken with other wiki editors regarding how to use images for deceased artists etc. In the case where a free image does not surface in the entire lifespan of the person, it is ok to use the image. For the time being, I moved this image down to where her final concert was talked about. It seems really incomplete to have no "live" picture of the person and just a pic of the statue? Benjwong (talk) 07:11, 14 July 2008 (UTC)

1. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

   Good luck improving the article REZTER ^TALK ø 23:28, 13 July 2008 (UTC)