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  This article is or was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Journoloaf. Peer reviewers: Mrmauss, Bec246.

Above undated message substituted from Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org assignment by PrimeBOT (talk) 14:07, 16 January 2022 (UTC)Reply

Career Section edit

Hello,

I did I couple of edits on your article (nothing major), I added an in-line attribution to the LA Times before each quote in the introduction and fixed a typo. Under the career section it's mentioned that Kokkinos is from an immigrant family but nothing else is mentioned about her background (other than her being Australian), perhaps you could add her family's background in a biography section or in the introduction. Also when Head On (1998) is mentioned in the career section an interview with the LA Times is referenced. In one sentence Head On divides the Greek community and in the next, where Kokkinos is quoted, the film broke down barriers - I would suggest either adding an additional sentence in-between or rephrasing. Simply because when I first read that section I wasn't sure if she meant that the film divided the community and then provided an opportunity for dialogue between the community. Or if the film divided the community, but for a different section of the community broke down barriers and provided an opportunity for communication. Hope these suggestions are useful, good luck with your article =) Bec246 (talk) 20:14, 7 October 2015 (UTC)Reply

My only suggestion is to make a table with her filmography on it within the Career subheading. This would be make it easier for readers to see what films she's done without reading the entire section - simplicity is key. - MrMauss