Talk:Amos Dresser

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1. First, what does the article do well? Is there anything from your review that impressed you? Any turn of phrase that described the subject in a clear way?—Everything is cited and this gives a genal overview 2. What changes would you suggest the author apply to the article? Why would those changes be an improvement?—I think having a lot more content would improve this article—there aren’t any details associated. Talking more about the book could also be useful to the reader 3. What's the most important thing the author could do to improve the article?—adding content and details about the event. Missybryan (talk) 20:39, 28 February 2020 (UTC)

1) The core organization is solid and the citations are perfectly on point. There is also variety among the sources instead of only one persons view point.

2) The article is succinct but needs each section to be added to so that there is more story and detail. I know nothing about this person so relate to me the story. Doing so may also add to the organizational structure as it may mean adding sub sections under the primary ones. You can also try linking to other Wiki pages to fill in holes in your story. This guy sounds really interesting. He was beaten and survived to tell about his experience. So you possibly have in your sources somewhere his fist hand account of what happened and his feelings and thoughts about it after. Fill those details in so that I can empathize as a reader as I learn about Mr. Dresser. What did he actually do? No laws were broken so why was he beaten? How was he involved in abolitionism? What was the social / cultural environment like in this place at this time regarding the issues at hand? These are some questions I have for instance that you can answer.

3) Pull the story out of your sources and put it down for us to read.

4) I tend to be overly wordy in my writing so it would benefit me to be more direct and to the point like you are trying to be.Jericho2911 (talk) 22:56, 28 February 2020 (UTC)

1. The article is very succinct, it summarizes what happened to Amos Dresser in few words. I also like the title, it adds color to the situation and keys the audience in on what they are about to read.

2. One change I would make would to add more details to your sections along with adding a few more sections. The title "Background" is a little vague, maybe replace them with titles more pertinent to the life of Amos Dresser. By breaking the sections down, you would be able to provide more pointed details about whatever you are trying to talk about. For instance, the "aftermath" section speaks only of Dresser, were there any other effects of his actions outside of him getting lashed? Ways to work in more details would help your story I believe.

3. I think the most important improvement to make would be to add more details. You have a number of good high quality sources, and some more information from them would be wonderful.

4. One thing that I personally took away from this article that could be applied to my own would be your use of citations. You seem to have a much better grip on the technical workings of wikipedia than I, and I think you have a nice and neat sources list. Gloorjf (talk) 03:16, 29 February 2020 (UTC)

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